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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view? v. 4
It is often argued that some people believe that if technology improves, cultural traditions will be die out. I partially agree with this opinion and think that technology development are not compatible in developed cities but it will be different when it comes to suburban. First of all, I believe that in urban areas have been changed a lot of drastic improvement by technology. In these modern era, individual tend to use the social sites to communicate with the friends and relatives. As a result, they lose strong relationship in the society will be tear down. In addition to, people knows about their neighbourhood but these days who don't know their closest residents. For example, people usually spends time with their families to bounce back of tension but now it is rarely seen. Secondly, technology advanced in the rural areas are still aid for their work. In other words, it is vividly seen that provides greater contribution to the development of farm industry to complete the process. Furthermore, technology also helps to access latest information by using the internet in suburban areas. For instance, the traditional skills like crafting, pottery are still passed on from parents to their offspring. To conclude, in few cases it is honestly shows that loss of relationship and lifestyle is due to the technology advanced; however, in some areas, numerous cultures are still provides significant advance in technology.
It is
often
argued that
some
people
believe that if
technology
improves
, cultural traditions will be
die
out. I
partially
agree
with this opinion and
think
that
technology
development are not compatible in developed cities
but
it will be
different
when it
comes
to suburban.

First of all
, I believe that in urban
areas
have been
changed
a lot of
drastic improvement by
technology
. In these modern era, individual tend to
use
the social sites to communicate with the friends and relatives.
As a result
, they lose strong relationship in the society will be tear down.
In addition
to,
people
knows
about their
neighbourhood
but
these days who don't know their closest residents.
For example
,
people
usually
spends time with their families to bounce back of tension
but
now
it is rarely
seen
.

Secondly
,
technology
advanced in the rural
areas
are
still
aid for their work.
In other words
, it is
vividly
seen
that provides greater contribution to the development of farm industry to complete the process.
Furthermore
,
technology
also
helps
to access
latest
information by using the internet in suburban
areas
.
For instance
, the traditional
skills
like crafting, pottery are
still
passed on from parents to their offspring.

To conclude
, in few cases it is
honestly
shows
that loss of relationship and lifestyle is due to the
technology
advanced;
however
, in
some
areas
, numerous cultures are
still
provides significant advance in
technology
.
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IELTS essay It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view?

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