Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? v.13

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view? v. 13
It is a view held by some people that as technology progresses age-old traditions are bound to become extinct since machinery, and traditional cultures are unsuited. I completely agree with the view held. Modern technology has transformed the lives of human beings. In the process of this transformation valuable tradition, and cultures have been forgotten. The industrial revolution proved to be a remarkable phenomenon for mankind. The ease of human labour made man turn towards machines. Although in a bid to create machines that free slaves, individuals became slaves to these machines. Since the advent of technological development citizens is no longer possessive about their culture. For example, the current issue in every household is the lack of communication between parents, and children due to the mobile phone. The custom of celebrating festivals together has died out, as families are more concerned with material gifts. Even though advertisements promote their goods as binding family material, little can be done to this irreparable damage. Several researchers are alarmed with the way a family operates. In days of old having meals together was a must, while today it is quite the opposite. Gadgets, and gizmos are more influential than bedtime stories recited by grandparents. Traditions are the base of human identity, however the current scenario has resulted in an identity crisis for man. It is certain that the technology, and customs do not get along together. In an ecosystem filled with choices to make life simple, people aren't willing to follow traditional methods. In conclusion, it can be stated that we are not long away to see old customs disappear completely.
It is a view held by
some
people
that as technology progresses age-
old
traditions
are bound
to become extinct since machinery, and traditional cultures
are unsuited
. I completely
agree
with the view held.

Modern technology has transformed the
lives
of human beings. In the process of this transformation valuable tradition, and cultures have
been forgotten
. The industrial revolution proved to be a remarkable phenomenon for mankind. The
ease
of human
labour
made
man
turn towards machines. Although in a bid to create machines that free slaves, individuals became slaves to these machines.
Since
the advent of technological development citizens is no longer possessive about their culture.
For example
, the
current
issue in every household is the lack of communication between parents, and children due to the mobile phone. The custom of celebrating festivals together has
died
out, as families are more concerned with material gifts.
Even though
advertisements promote their
goods
as binding family material,
little
can
be done
to this irreparable damage. Several researchers
are alarmed
with the way a family operates. In days of
old
having meals together was a
must
, while
today
it is quite the opposite. Gadgets, and gizmos are more influential than bedtime stories recited by grandparents. Traditions are the base of human identity,
however
the
current
scenario has resulted in an identity crisis for
man
.

It is certain that the technology, and customs do not
get
along together. In an ecosystem filled with choices to
make
life simple,
people
aren't willing to follow traditional methods.

In conclusion
, it can
be stated
that we are not long away to
see
old
customs disappear completely.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts