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It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. v. 1
To bring a change to the world, an individual needs to start it from their own house and same goes to the above mentioned statement as well. I highly do agree with the point that governments should only focus on their own countries because each kingdom has a government and if the authorities are strong enough to make changes in their respective countries for betterment, at the point it will lead to an overall change in the entire earth. There are several changes that can be made in for the growth of a nation, for an instance, in the education system, cleanliness, pollution control, rise in the employment rate, medical facilities etc. For an example, if a city has the highest literacy late, medical facilities, employment options and pollution control ideas, later a particular city always stays ahead in terms of growth as compared of rest of the towns or cities in a community because higher literacy rate will lead to better job opportunities and better knowledge and awareness about medical facilities and when you have all these qualities, soon after you take initiatives to keep their areas clean and try to find ways to minimize pollution too because they want a healthy life. On the basis of all the above mentioned examples, I believe it gives a clear picture about the advantages the nation will get by focusing only on people of their own homeland. In the other scenario, if we talk about the same statement by keeping in head if we want to help all the people in the world, so it would be a tough task because the population rate, resource availability, economy's strength all that varies from region to region. So, the steps taken to help the people of one terrain might not be beneficial for the other one because if one land offers free education of the second child and in that specific soil the couples on an average have two children, so it will be beneficial for them, but in another country where people have 4 or 5 kids the same policy might not be useful. In conclusion, I would like to state that all the governments can unite together to help each other in order to make the world a better place by helping all the people around the globe. They should unite together to take help for what they do not have in their own territory, but they should work separately in their respective countries because they know their country better.
To bring a
change
to the world, an individual needs to
start
it from their
own
house
and same goes to the above mentioned statement
as well
. I
highly
do
agree
with the point that
governments
should
only
focus on their
own
countries
because
each kingdom has a
government
and if the authorities are strong
enough
to
make
changes
in their respective
countries
for betterment, at the point it will lead to an
overall
change
in the entire earth.

There are several
changes
that can
be made
in for the growth of a nation, for an instance, in the education system, cleanliness, pollution control, rise in the employment rate, medical facilities etc. For an example, if a city has the highest literacy late, medical facilities, employment options and pollution control
ideas
, later a particular city always stays ahead in terms of growth as compared of rest of the towns or cities in a community
because
higher literacy rate will lead to
better
job opportunities and
better
knowledge and awareness about medical facilities and when you have all these qualities,
soon
after you take initiatives to
keep
their areas clean and try to find ways to minimize pollution too
because
they want a healthy life. On the basis of all the above mentioned examples, I believe it gives a
clear
picture about the advantages the nation will
get
by focusing
only
on
people
of their
own
homeland.

In the other scenario, if we talk about the same statement by keeping in head if we want to
help
all the
people
in the world,
so
it would be a tough task
because
the population rate, resource availability, economy's strength all that varies from region to region.
So
, the steps taken to
help
the
people
of one terrain might not be beneficial for the other one
because
if one land offers free education of the second child and in that specific soil the couples on an average have two children,
so
it will be beneficial for them,
but
in another
country
where
people
have 4 or 5 kids the same policy might not be useful.

In conclusion
, I would like to state that all the
governments
can unite together to
help
each other in order to
make
the world a
better
place by helping all the
people
around the globe. They should unite together to take
help
for what they do not have in their
own
territory,
but
they should work
separately
in their respective
countries
because
they know their
country
better
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
419 words
6.5
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