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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen? v.53

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen? v. 53
Some people opine that punishing children is necessary so that they learn how to differentiate between good and bad at a younger age. This essay disagrees with this statement because children could react negatively to punishments. Some basic punishments like reducing TV time or not being allowed to eat candy after dinner can be used by elders to educate good etiquette to children. Violent conduct towards children is not only ethically wrong, but also impractical. It is vital for children to understand what is wrong or appropriate, but I strongly disagree that punishment is the way to do so. Children would be able to recognise the correct things if they are awarded perks or gifts as an appraisal. For instance, a recent study by the Worlds childcare organisation has found out that 70% of children react negatively to punishment. As a result, most of them turn out to be stubborn instead of being good. On the other hand, teachers and parents can punish children to develop good behaviour in children. Punishments such as taking away TV privileges for a week, prohibiting them to consume dessert after dinner, and reducing their playing time should be enough for children to ensure right way of doing things. For example, In a recent survey, Such punishments have shown an 60% improvement in children's morality compared to violent punishments which was just at 10%. In Conclusion, it is a common opinion that punishing children is essential for them to practice good behaviour. Neverthless, I completely disagree as there are positive, effective methods that help them understand to be moral at an early age. Elders should be allowed to punish their children in a lenient manner so that they can control them while rooting for the children's betterment.
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opine that punishing
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children
is necessary
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so
that they learn how to differentiate between
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good
and
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bad
at a younger age. This essay disagrees with this statement
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because
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children
could react
negatively
to
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punishments
.
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Some
basic
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punishments
like reducing TV time or not being
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allowed
to eat candy after dinner can be
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used
by elders to educate
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good
etiquette to children.

Violent conduct towards
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children
is not
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only
ethically
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wrong
,
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but
also
impractical. It is vital for
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children
to understand what is
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wrong
or appropriate,
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but
I
strongly
disagree that
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punishment
is the way to do
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so
.
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Children
would be able to
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recognise
the correct things if they
are awarded
perks or gifts as an appraisal.
For instance
, a recent study by the
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Worlds
childcare
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organisation
has found out that 70% of
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children
react
negatively
to
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punishment
.
As a result
, most of them turn out to be stubborn
instead
of being
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good
.

On the other hand
, teachers and parents can punish
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children
to develop
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good
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behaviour
in
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children
.
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Punishments
such as taking away TV privileges for a week, prohibiting them to consume dessert after dinner, and reducing their playing time should be
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enough
for
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children
to ensure right way of doing things.
For example
, In a recent survey, Such
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punishments
have shown an 60% improvement in children's morality compared to violent
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punishments
which was
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just
at 10%.

In Conclusion
, it is a common opinion that punishing
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children
is essential for them to practice
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good
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behaviour
.
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Neverthless
, I completely disagree as there are
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positive
, effective methods that
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help
them understand to be moral at an early age. Elders should be
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allowed
to punish their
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children
Consider replacing "in a lenient manner" with the adverb for "lenient"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a lenient manner
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so
that they can control them while rooting for the children's betterment.
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen? v. 53

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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