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Some People believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.23

Some People believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 23
Due to the materialized world, the people have certainly suffered from many criminal activities. Some people perceive that there should be a fix punishment for all types of an offence, while others opine that consider the situation of a captive before deciding the action. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, the predominant reason to give a same punishment is people never try to attempt any wrong action. This will create a situation where people being afraid of the authority’s strict action. Moreover, this will save the time of the jurisdiction and the person who suffered from the antisocial work. As there is a fix punishment for any type of work. So, after finding the captive punishment will apply to them. Although laymen can feel secure in the urban areas during any time of the day, knowing the laws which imposed if any misconduct will occur. For example, having fixed punishment the women can move safely alone in any part of the globe. On the other hand, others think that before finalizing the punishment the government should listen the captive condition. The first reason is that sometimes the crime would occur due to the situation. As the criminal will automatically fall in the situation which leads to the misconduct. Furthermore, another reason is that this will give a positive atmosphere to the criminal. However, they will try to come out from and takes steps which leads to a noble person. For instance, the younger one become a criminal by doing theft, will get a chance to improvise his further life. In conclusion, as per my opinion, for some misconduct which create a detrimental impact on the society for that there should be fixed punishment, but for few small misdeeds done by younger criminals at that time consider their situation based on that decisions are taken.
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people
have
certainly
suffered from
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many
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criminal
activities.
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Some
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people
perceive that there should be a
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fix
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punishment
for all types of an
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offence
, while others opine that consider the
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situation
of a captive
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before
deciding the action. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the predominant reason to give a same
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punishment
is
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people
never try to attempt any
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wrong
action. This will create a
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situation
where
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people
being afraid of the authority’s strict action.
Moreover
, this will save the time of the jurisdiction and the person who suffered from the antisocial work. As there is a
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fix
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punishment
for any type of work.
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So, after
finding the captive
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punishment
will apply to them. Although laymen can feel secure in the urban areas during any time of the day, knowing the laws which imposed if any misconduct will occur.
For example
, having
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fixed
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punishment
the women can
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move
safely
alone in any part of the globe.

On the other hand
, others
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think
that
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before
finalizing the
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punishment
the
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government
should listen the captive condition. The
first
reason is that
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sometimes
the crime would occur due to the
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situation
.
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As
the
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criminal
will
automatically
fall in the
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situation
which leads to the misconduct.
Furthermore
, another reason is that this will give a
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positive
atmosphere to the
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criminal
.
However
, they will try to
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come
out from and takes steps which leads to a noble person.
For instance
, the younger one become a
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criminal
by doing theft, will
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get
a chance to improvise his
further
life.

In conclusion
, as per my opinion, for
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some
misconduct which create a detrimental impact on the society for that there should be
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fixed
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punishment
,
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but
for few
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small
misdeeds done by younger
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criminals
at that time consider their
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situation
based on that decisions
are taken
.
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IELTS essay Some People believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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