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it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v.44

it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 44
It is believed that parents and teachers should use punishment to teach children to distinguish between wrong and right. To a certain extent, I think agree with that view. But, I also think that discipline causes some serious consequences for children. Nevertheless, there are some efficient ways for parents and teachers to utilize to teach good action to children. On the one hand, I would agree that discipline needs to help children distinguish between right and wrong. When children are punished, they will be aware of what they act is wrong and foolish. Children would be taught morality and good qualities. And this might help children have a good personality when they grow up. On the other hand, children tend to conflict with their parents or their teachers, or even be hurt if the adult punishes them in wrong ways. Since children are very vulnerable. Thus, parents and teachers must utilize suitable measures to educate their children. Some ways could be used to teach children the difference between wrong and right. First, parents and teachers shouldn’t utilize any violent punishments. It means that they had better give advice and criticism about their bad behaviour. For instance, the adult should indicate these consequences if children act wrong or foolish. As a result, children will improve their personality to avoid bad consequences. Besides, parents and teachers also need to set a good example for children. Since, at an early age, children usually mimic the gesture and actions of their parents or teachers surrounding them. In this way, children can form a good personality naturally. In conclusion, punishment is indeed important to teach children, but I also believe that there are several consequences if parents and teachers use the wrong ways to teach their children. Thus, parents and teachers should use, efficient ways to teach their children regarding giving advice and criticism and setting a good example for children.
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use
punishment to
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to distinguish between
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wrong
and right. To a certain extent, I
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think
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agree
with that view.
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, I
also
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think
that discipline causes
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some
serious consequences for
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children
.
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, there are
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efficient
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and
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to utilize to
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good
action to children.

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agree
that discipline needs to
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help
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children
distinguish between right and
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wrong
. When
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children
are punished
, they will be aware of what they act is
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wrong
and foolish.
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would
be taught
morality and
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good
qualities. And this might
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help
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children
have a
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good
personality when they grow up.
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,
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children
tend to conflict with their
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parents
or their
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teachers
, or even
be hurt
if the adult punishes them in
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wrong
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ways
. Since
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children
are
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vulnerable.
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,
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and
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must
utilize suitable measures to educate their children.

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Some
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could be
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to
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children
the difference between
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wrong
and right.
First
,
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and
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shouldn’t utilize any violent punishments. It means that they had better give advice and criticism about their
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bad
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behaviour
.
For instance
, the adult should indicate these consequences if
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children
act
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wrong
or foolish.
As a result
,
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children
will
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improve
their personality to avoid
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bad
consequences.
Besides
,
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and
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also
need to set a
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good
example for
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children
. Since, at an early age,
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children
usually
mimic the gesture and actions of their
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parents
or
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teachers
surrounding them. In this
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way
,
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children
can form a
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good
personality
naturally
.

In conclusion
, punishment is
indeed
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to
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teach
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,
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I
also
believe that there are several consequences if
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parents
and
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use
the
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wrong
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ways
to
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teach
their
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children
.
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,
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and
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teachers
should
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use
, efficient
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to
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their
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children
regarding giving advice and criticism and setting a
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good
example for
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children
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 44

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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