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In some countries, children under 16 are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work. Is this a good or bad thing? v.3

In some countries, children under 16 are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work. Is this a good or bad thing? v. 3
In some nations, school-age kids should get compulsory schooling by regulation and cannot take up any regular job. In my opinion, this is a good thing every child should have access to basic education, which can immensely contribute to their confidence and attitudes. Today, providing school education is one of the fundamental act of some countries and not allowing them to work is also taking out lot of physical and mental stress at a younger age. In a competitive world all kids irrespective of their background should have access to basic things in life. For example, in Finland till the age of secondary school. The government takes care of their studies which is provided free of cost. Moreover, in a recent study done by the world body, published that around 75% of this child get academic degree. However, there may be instances where one has to pick up some kind of job at such a young age, will have detrimental consequences for them. To take up any one job has to have certain maturity and physical attributes, but children would lack such parameters due to their fragile physical nature. By enacting law of the land, such hiring would not be possible and will benefit the nation. To illustrate, the times paper, had a story of china employing underage adolescent in factories under unhygienic conditions, which is taking a toll on their health. Such things take place due to not having proper laws. In conclusion, it is better every government offers free education to children till certain age and make the proper law against child labour. Even if some child has to work, due to law institution can take proper care of such kids.
In
some
nations, school-age kids should
get
compulsory schooling by regulation and cannot take up any regular job. In my opinion, this is a
good
thing every
child
should have access to basic education, which can
immensely
contribute to their confidence and attitudes.

Today
, providing school education is one of the fundamental act of
some
countries and not allowing them to work is
also
taking out
lot of
physical and mental
stress
at a younger
age
. In a competitive world all kids irrespective of their background should have access to basic things in life.
For example
, in Finland till the
age
of secondary school. The
government
takes care of their studies which
is provided
free of cost.
Moreover
, in a recent study done by the world body, published that around 75% of this
child
get
academic degree.

However
, there may be instances where one
has to
pick up
some
kind of job at such a young
age
, will have detrimental consequences for them. To take up any one job
has to
have certain maturity and physical attributes,
but
children would lack such parameters due to their fragile physical nature. By enacting law of the land, such hiring would not be possible and will benefit the nation. To illustrate, the times paper, had a story of china employing underage adolescent in factories under unhygienic conditions, which is taking a toll on their health. Such things take place due to not having proper laws.

In conclusion
, it is better every
government
offers free education to children till certain
age
and
make
the proper law against
child
labour
. Even if
some
child
has to
work, due to law institution can take proper care of such kids.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, children under 16 are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work. Is this a good or bad thing? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
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