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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v.37

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 37
The right moral and ethical education of the individual begins at a young age. Children in formative years are particularly susceptible to whom they connect in during life, for example their parents and teachers. My conviction is that a system of punishments and rewards plays vital role in the child's learning since this helps youth distinguish between right and wrong. Without rewards and Punishments, children can not recognise the distinction between right behaviour and inappropriate modes. Parents as gatekeeper warn children to the moral behaviour or immoral behaviour, the children may not be in a position to understand the difference. Under such a situation, when they are informed they will realise that their act was unacceptable and this will deter them from repeating the same. For example, in some regions in Asia, young children are compelled to clean the shoes of devotees in the Temple. this reprimand helps a child realise his or her mistakes. Despite the necessity of punishment to train children, parents and teachers should make sure that this procedure is constructive in nature and not destructive. After that, if sanctions are needed, they could use a variety of methods to discipline their young children, such as detection, withdrawal of privileged and time-out. For instance, parents could cease giving them pocket money or prevent them from playing with their friends. In conclusion, gatekeeper like parents and teachers could possess a significant role in children's formative personality. I powerfully agree that punishment could be useful and it can improve child's responsibility, which leads him or her to much better stable and sustainable future behaviour.
The right moral and ethical education of the individual
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parents
and teachers. My conviction is that a system of
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punishments
and rewards plays vital role in the child's learning since this
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helps
youth distinguish between right and
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wrong
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Without rewards and
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,
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children
can not
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recognise
the distinction between right
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behaviour
and inappropriate modes.
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Parents
as gatekeeper warn
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children
to the moral
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behaviour
or immoral
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behaviour
, the
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children
may not be in a position to understand the difference. Under such a situation, when they
are informed
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realise
that their act was unacceptable and this will deter them from repeating the same.
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some
regions in Asia, young
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children
are compelled
to clean the shoes of devotees in the Temple.
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reprimand
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helps
a child
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realise
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his or her
mistakes.

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punishment
to train
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children
,
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parents
and teachers should
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make
sure that this procedure is constructive in nature and not destructive. After that, if sanctions
are needed
, they could
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use
a variety of methods to discipline their young
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children
, such as detection, withdrawal of privileged and time-out.
For instance
,
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parents
could cease giving them pocket money or
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prevent
them from playing with their friends.

In conclusion
, gatekeeper like
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parents
and teachers could possess a significant role in children's formative personality. I
powerfully
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agree
that
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punishment
could be useful and it can
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improve
child's responsibility, which leads him or her
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much better stable and sustainable future
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behaviour
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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