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The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901 v.1

The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901 v. 1
In recent years, an important problem is deforestation that affects human life. This essay will discuss the importance of forests to the environment, and to solve this problem. The forest is a habitat for flora and fauna.   Forests also have the most important role in life, which is oxygen circulating. Increasing carbon dioxide levels will affect our wildlife population. The most known consequence of deforestation is its threat to biodiversity In fact, forests represent some of the most veritable hubs of biodiversity. From mammals to birds, insects, amphibians or plants, the jungle is home to many rare and fragile species. Firstly, taking down trees means they’ll release back into the atmosphere the CO2 they were keeping. We know that living things need tons of oxygen. If oxygen is reduced, it will affect some animals and plants. Secondly, fewer trees available means reducing the planet’s overall ability to capture and store CO2. Both these effects negatively contribute to the greenhouse effect and to climate change. The solution is to protect the green parts of the earth. The important role attends to governments which will cope with logging. An action that can be taken by government and organization is to protect forest area, creating laws and policies that ensure jungle are kept protected. The last solution is Spreading awareness. Education should be designed to raise awareness of the impact of deforestation so that people would stop cutting down the forests. Teach your family, friends or colleagues about the issues around deforestation. To conclude, humans, both government and non-government alike, breathe the same air. Humans should work together to protect nature better than before.
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problem is deforestation that affects human life. This essay will discuss the importance of
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forests
to the environment, and to solve this problem.

The
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is a habitat for flora and fauna.
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Forests
also
have the most
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important
role in life, which is oxygen circulating. Increasing carbon dioxide levels will affect our wildlife population. The most known consequence of deforestation is its threat to biodiversity In fact,
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forests
represent
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some
of the most veritable hubs of biodiversity. From mammals to birds, insects, amphibians or plants, the jungle is home to
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rare and fragile species.
Firstly
, taking down trees means they’ll release back into the atmosphere the CO2 they were keeping. We know that living things need tons of oxygen. If oxygen is
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reduced
, it will affect
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animals and plants.
Secondly
, fewer trees available means reducing the planet’s
overall
ability to capture and store CO2. Both these effects
negatively
contribute to the greenhouse effect and to climate
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.

The solution is to protect the green parts of the earth. The
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important
role attends to
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governments
which will cope with logging. An action that can
be taken
by
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government
and organization is to protect
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forest
area, creating laws and policies that ensure jungle are
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kept
protected. The last solution is Spreading awareness. Education should
be designed
to raise awareness of the impact of deforestation
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so
that
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people
would
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stop
cutting down the
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forests
. Teach your family, friends or colleagues about the issues around deforestation.

To conclude
, humans, both
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government
and non-
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government
alike, breathe the same air. Humans should work together to protect nature better than
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before
.
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IELTS essay The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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