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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v.16

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 16
Children are at such age of their life when they barely know between the right and the wrong. It is very necessary for parents and teachers to teach them, first, by suggestion followed by punishment if they manage to do the same mistake. This essay agrees that it is acceptable to give child punishment so they know the difference between good and bad. Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that punishment teaches children to be responsible and secondly, discuss punishment doesn’t always have to be physical. Punishment teaches children self-discipline. The goal of punishment or discipline is to help your kid learn to be responsible and learn how to make choices. Letting adolescence experience the consequences of his choices lets him learn how to be accountable for his actions. A child learns over time to look inside to make a choice rather to what they will get from outside themselves. For instance, in the Islamic religion, parents are required to order their children to pray when they are seven years old and beat them (if they still don't pray) when they are ten years old. That was solely for their child good and for the child to get used to. Despite the need for punishment to teach a child punishments should always be associated with some lessons for children. Punishment must be fruitful and it must not be physically or mentally harmful. For example, Schools in Japan asks children to plant trees as a punishment. An elementary school in America punishes children by asking them to join a yoga class. Such punishments are constructive for children's health and society as well. To conclude, punishment is necessary to teach children morality and help them learn to distinguish good things from bad ones. However, this punishment should not be physical but psychological and practical.
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barely
know between the right and the
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wrong
. It is
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very
necessary for parents and teachers to
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teach
them,
first
, by suggestion followed by
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punishment
if they manage to do the same mistake. This essay
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agrees
that it is acceptable to give
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child
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punishment
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so
they know the difference between
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good
and
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bad
.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the fact that
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punishment
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teaches
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children
to be responsible and
secondly
, discuss
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punishment
doesn’t always
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have to
be physical.

Punishment
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teaches
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children
self-discipline. The goal of
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punishment
or discipline is to
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help
your kid
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learn
to be responsible and
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learn
how to
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make
choices. Letting adolescence experience the consequences of his choices
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lets
him
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learn
how to be accountable for his actions. A
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child
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learns
over time to look inside to
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make
a choice
rather
to what they will
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get
from outside themselves.
For instance
, in the Islamic religion, parents
are required
to order their
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children
to pray when they are seven years
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old
and beat them (if they
still
don't pray) when they are ten years
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old
. That was
solely
for their
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child
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good
and for the
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child
to
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get
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used
to.

Despite the need for
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punishment
to
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teach
a
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child
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punishments
should always
be associated
with
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some
lessons for
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children
.
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Punishment
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must
be fruitful and it
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must
not be
physically
or mentally harmful.
For example
, Schools in Japan asks
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children
to plant trees as a
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punishment
. An elementary school in America punishes
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children
by asking them to
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join
a yoga
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class
. Such
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punishments
are constructive for children's health and society
as well
.

To conclude
,
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punishment
is necessary to
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teach
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children
morality and
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help
them
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learn
to distinguish
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good
things from
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bad
ones.
However
, this
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punishment
should not be physical
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but
psychological and practical.
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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