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It is difficult for teachers to be both popular (well-liked) and effective to help students learning. v.1

It is difficult for teachers to be both popular (well-liked) and effective to help students learning. v. 1
It is mostly seen nowadays that children are getting habitual with spending their free time in front of the TV even if it affects their development. I completely agree with this belief and think that children should be given limited hour to watch television. Firstly, I believe that children should spend more and more hours with family and friends to increase their communication skills resulting in the child coming out to be an extrovert in the future. Even if television is the best method to pass the time, but there are many other methods that are better for the kid to pass its free intervals and also develop with time. Sitting in front of the idiot box a child will get addicted to it and won't prefer to go out because of its addiction towards the box. For example, when a person is addicted to TV while his/her friends are playing an outdoor game, then he/she won't go with them and rather prefer to sit on the sofa and watch tv and this will stop their physical development as well. That's why it is important to limit the term that children spend looking at the TV screens. Secondly continuously watching Tv affects the eyes of people and skimps the vision due to putting stress on the eyes. In other words, when a child is watching tv continuously for 2 to 3 hours he or she might get glasses easily due to putting pressure on the eyes while looking at the screens. Thus restricting the kid from watching Tv for very less hours might be beneficial for their eyes. To conclude, I strongly believe that children should be allowed to sit in front of the television only for a limited time period as this would be helpful in their development process.
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mostly
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seen
nowadays that
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children
are getting habitual with spending their free
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time
in front of the TV even if it affects their development. I completely
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agree
with this belief and
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think
that
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children
should be
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given
limited
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hour
to
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watch
television.

Firstly
, I believe that
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children
should spend more and more
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hours
with family and friends to increase their communication
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skills
resulting in the child coming out to be an extrovert in the future. Even if television is the best method to pass the
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time
,
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but
there are
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many
other methods that are better for the kid to pass its free intervals and
also
develop with
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time
. Sitting in front of the idiot box a child will
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get
addicted to it and won't prefer to go out
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because
of its addiction towards the box.
For example
, when a person
is addicted
to TV while his/her friends are playing an outdoor game, then he/she won't
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go with
them and
rather
prefer to sit on the sofa and
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watch
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tv
and this will
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stop
their physical development
as well
. That's why it is
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important
to limit the term that
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children
spend looking at the TV screens.

Secondly
continuously
watching
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Tv
affects the eyes of
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people
and skimps the vision due to putting
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stress
on the eyes.
In other words
, when a child is watching
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tv
continuously
for 2 to 3
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hours
he or she might
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get
glasses
easily
due to putting pressure on the eyes while looking at the screens.
Thus
restricting the kid from watching
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Tv
for
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very
less
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hours
might be beneficial for their eyes.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that
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children
should be
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allowed
to sit in front of the television
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only
for a limited
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
period as this would be helpful in their development process.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is difficult for teachers to be both popular (well-liked) and effective to help students learning. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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