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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay v.8

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay v. 8
Now a days, cities has a lot of difficulties like traficgams, air poloution, nois, etc. So people has lot of problem like lak of time, disease, mental problem. Hence some people prefer to stay out of the cities and have calm and peasful life. besides of that they have enough time to spend with thier families and raise their children. other people like to stay at the cities becuase of cities facilities and services for their children. these two idea has different reason and it will be describe in the next paragraph. As it is mentioned above, some people like to live in the countryside of the city because of lots of reason. they dont like to waste their time in the trafic, they perefer to breath fresh air, they like to spend time with their families and specificly with their children. they like to see how their children grow up and play with them. send them to school, make better condition for them to raise. on the other hand, other ones dont like to stay at subereb and they dont like has routin life. Also, they afraid if they live in the countrieside, thier children cant use services and facilities which is ready for them in the city. they think its better for their children to send them to the best classes in the cities, prepare them the best thing and make comfortable atmospher for them. in conclusion, both of the group concern about their children and they tried to make best condition for their child. But they should check their priorities and find the best one.
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, disease, mental problem.
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people
prefer to stay out of the
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cities
and have calm and
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peasful
life.
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besides
of that they have
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enough
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time
to spend with
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thier
families and raise their
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children
.
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other
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people
like to stay at the
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cities
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becuase
of
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cities
facilities and services for their
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children
.
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these
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idea
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reason and it will be
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describe
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is mentioned
above,
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people
like to
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in the countryside of the city
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because
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they
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time
in the
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trafic
, they
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perefer
to breath fresh air, they like to spend
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time
with their families and
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specificly
with their
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children
.
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they
like to
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see
how their
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children
grow up and play with them.
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send
them to school,
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make
better condition for them to raise.

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on
the other hand, other ones
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dont
like to stay at
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they
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routin
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, they afraid if they
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countrieside
,
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children
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services and facilities which is ready for them in the city.
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they
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think
its better for their
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children
to
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them to the
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best
classes in the
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cities
, prepare them the
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best
thing and
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make
comfortable
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atmospher
for them.

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in
conclusion, both of the group concern about their
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children and
they tried to
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make
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best
condition for their child.
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But
they should
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check
their priorities and find the
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best
one.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
35Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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