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21. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. v.1

21. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. v. 1
In many countries, clinical trials are broadcasted on television. Due to this the general public can watch what is happening in law courts. I believe the advantages are equal to disadvantages. It is in the human nature to learn from others experiences. The escalating rates of crimes can be decreased by setting an example of criminals in front of the public. As an illustration, In Iran, the rapist’s trials in law courts are shown on television to discourage the intentions of other offenders. This has remarkably reduced crime rates in Iran. Many countries are also following this trend. Therefore, discouragement of wrongdoers can be assured by telecasting their trials on the television. Broadcasting trials on television can increase injustice. The public opinion would be based on what the media portrays. Because of the biased opinion and lack of knowledge about judicial system justice cannot be done. To illustrate, those offenders who have enough wealth, try to bribe media. This act leads to the portrayal of their positive image among the general population. Consequently, people favour them by participating in rallies and outrageous activities. Such act leads to instability of economic status in countries, ultimately affecting individuals. This leads to build up of pressure on the higher authorities. Thus, the legal activities are hindered, leading to injustice and other legal issues. To conclude, in recent years, many law courts in different countries offer trials to telecast publicly on television. The benefits of it are equal to demerits as a whole. This trend will increase in foreseeable future.
In
many
countries
, clinical
trials
are broadcasted
on
television
. Due to this the
general public
can
watch
what is happening in law courts. I believe the advantages are equal to disadvantages.

It is in the human nature to learn from others experiences. The escalating rates of crimes can
be decreased
by setting an example of criminals in front of the public. As an illustration, In Iran, the rapist’s
trials
in law courts
are shown
on
television
to discourage the intentions of other offenders. This has
remarkably
reduced
crime rates in Iran.
Many
countries
are
also
following this trend.
Therefore
, discouragement of wrongdoers can
be assured
by telecasting their
trials
on the television.

Broadcasting
trials
on
television
can increase injustice. The public opinion would
be based
on what the media
portrays
.
Because
of the biased opinion and lack of knowledge about judicial system justice cannot
be done
. To illustrate, those offenders who have
enough
wealth, try to bribe media. This act leads to the portrayal of their
positive
image among the general population.
Consequently
,
people
favour
them by participating in rallies and outrageous activities. Such act leads to instability of economic status in
countries
,
ultimately
affecting individuals. This leads to build up of pressure on the higher authorities.
Thus
, the legal activities
are hindered
, leading to injustice and other legal issues.

To conclude
, in recent years,
many
law courts in
different
countries
offer
trials
to telecast
publicly
on
television
. The benefits of it are equal to demerits as a whole. This trend will increase in foreseeable future.
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IELTS essay 21. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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