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12. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. v.1

12. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. v. 1
With the advancement of science and technology and rapid industrialization, utilization has been on the rise, leading to increase in demand of these commodities. Many believe that new areas of the world should be explored to meet these demands. In my opinion, I disagree because further exploration would not only be expensive, but also the excessive utility of oil and gas is an environmental hazard and instead of wasting money on further oil and gas exploration, other sources of energy should be introduced. Exploration of oil and gas is an extremely expensive procedure which requires investment of millions of dollars by a country and even after this huge investment; output may not be much favourable. To give you an example, the government of Pakistan invested several million dollars on the digging of a new site in the Arabian Sea near Karachi where an oil and gas reserve was expected. But after an effort of several months and spending millions, it was a complete failure with no reserves found at all. Another problem with oil and gas exploration is that it is not an environment friendly source of energy. In other words, excessive consumption of fossil fuels has resulted in a rise in carbon contents and greenhouse effect leading to global warning. Furthermore, the Ozone layer around our atmosphere is being adversely affected leading to exposure of earth to the dangerous ultra-violet radiations which are causing various diseases and cancers to the human beings. I personally believe that because of these adverse effects of fossil fuels, money should be invested in other sources of energy rather than exploring new areas of the world for oil and gas. For instance, the developed countries are now shifting their investments from fossil fuels to other forms of energy like offshore wind farms, development of more energy efficient photovoltaic panels of solar energy and tidal energy of the oceans which are more environmentally friendly and becoming cheaper to use over time. To conclude, I think that new sources of energy should be explored and developed instead of wasting money on the fossil fuel exploration which is both expensive as well as hazardous for the environment.
With the advancement of science and technology and rapid industrialization, utilization has been on the rise, leading to increase in demand of these commodities.
Many
believe that
new
areas of the world should
be explored
to
meet
these demands. In my opinion, I disagree
because
further
exploration
would not
only
be expensive,
but
also
the excessive utility of
oil
and
gas
is an environmental hazard and
instead
of wasting money on
further
oil
and
gas
exploration
,
other
sources
of
energy
should
be introduced
.

Exploration of
oil
and
gas
is an
extremely
expensive procedure which requires investment of millions of dollars by a country and even after this huge investment; output may not be much
favourable
. To give you an example, the
government
of Pakistan invested several million dollars on the digging of a
new
site in the Arabian Sea near Karachi where an
oil
and
gas
reserve was
expected
.
But
after an effort of several months and spending millions, it was a complete failure with no reserves found at all.

Another problem with
oil
and
gas
exploration
is that it is not an environment friendly
source
of
energy
. In
other
words, excessive consumption of
fossil
fuels
has resulted in a rise in carbon contents and greenhouse effect leading to global warning.
Furthermore
, the Ozone layer around our atmosphere is being
adversely
affected
leading to exposure of earth to the
dangerous
ultra-violet radiations which are causing various diseases and cancers to the human beings.

I
personally
believe that
because
of these adverse effects of
fossil
fuels
, money should
be invested
in
other
sources
of
energy
rather
than exploring
new
areas of the world for
oil
and
gas
.
For instance
, the
developed countries
are
now
shifting their investments from
fossil
fuels
to
other
forms of
energy
like offshore wind farms, development of more
energy
efficient photovoltaic panels of solar
energy
and tidal
energy
of the oceans which are more
environmentally
friendly and becoming cheaper to
use
over time.

To conclude
, I
think
that
new
sources
of
energy
should
be explored
and developed
instead
of wasting money on the
fossil
fuel
exploration
which is both expensive
as well as
hazardous for the environment.
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IELTS essay 12. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
360 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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