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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? use specific reason examples to develop your essay. v.10

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. use specific reason examples to develop your essay. v. 10
Today, many parents believe that metro cities provide better facilities and infrastructure for children' s progress compare to the countryside. I also agree with this argument as it is apparent that big cities are becoming a growth center for all kind of people. I will discuss it in the following paragraphs. First of all, metro cities offer a guarantee of fast, quality and sustainable growth along with lots of choices especially for younger. this is because cities have more developed schools which provide explicit education along with other curricular activities. Secondly, big cities have fully equipped the sports complex and the art theater that can be used by the children to develop their skills in art and sports activity and show their talent at big munch. Additionally, usually knowledge gathering science and history fair which boost the student' s knowledge organize in metro cities only. Besides, some parents argue that to live and grow up in the countryside brings some great economic advantages. usually, countryside schools charged less fee compare to the cities school. The main reason for this is the cost of living is less in the countryside. Moreover, competition between pupils is less compared to big schools in cities. countryside usually a small area so students need to minimum traveling. The last thing I said, the environment in the countryside is very energetic and pollution free which brings the tremendous positive energy and keep themselves healthy and fit during their academic. In conclusion, although life in the countryside has some serious benefits, it is lacking in terms of serving modern education and essential attitude which must have in a new generation.
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Today
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many
parents believe that metro
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cities
provide better facilities and infrastructure for
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children&
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countryside
. I
also
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agree
with this argument as it is apparent that
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big
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cities
are becoming a growth center for all kind of
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people
. I will discuss it in the following paragraphs.

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First of all
, metro
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cities
offer a guarantee of
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fast
, quality and sustainable growth along with lots of choices
especially
for younger.
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this
is
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because
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cities
have more developed
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schools
which provide explicit education along with other curricular activities.
Secondly
,
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big
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cities
have
fully
equipped the sports complex and the art theater that can be
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used
by the children to develop their
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skills
in art and sports activity and
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show
their talent at
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big
munch.
Additionally
,
usually
knowledge gathering science and history
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fair
which boost the
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student&
#039; s knowledge organize in metro
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cities
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only
.

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,
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some
parents argue that to
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live
and grow up in the
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countryside
brings
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some
great economic advantages.
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usually
,
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countryside
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schools
charged less fee compare to the
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cities
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school
. The main reason for this is the cost of living is less in the
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countryside
.
Moreover
, competition between pupils is less compared to
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big
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schools
in
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cities
.
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countryside
usually
a
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small
area
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so
students need to minimum traveling. The last thing I said, the environment in the
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countryside
is
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very
energetic and pollution free which brings the tremendous
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positive
energy and
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keep
themselves healthy and fit during their academic.

In conclusion
, although life in the
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countryside
has
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some
serious benefits, it is lacking in terms of serving modern education and essential attitude which
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must
have in a new generation.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. use specific reason examples to develop your essay. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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