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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.21

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 21
Gap year or a year off after the ending of high school and the beginning of college is the choice of many students. Recently, this option has turned into a popular trend in a large amount of schools. This essay will analyze the benefits as well as the drawbacks of this development. It is clear that a gap year between high school and university has some noteworthy positive effects. What make the year off stands out is the opportunity for students to consider their future career. This would mean that they could schedule their future prospective and sharpen the skills they needs. Another benefit of gap year would that student can relax after a long period of constantly studying. For example, in Vietnam there is a twelve years compulsory program which all children should attend. The workload is quite enormous therefore a gap year is suitable. Nevertheless, there are drawbacks to such development. First and foremost, this might be a heavy burden on the employee market. At present, various jobs are under shortage of employees, and so a year off would mean a delay of new human resources. In addition, one year away from studying could make student to lose their study habits. It would be difficult for them to follow their usual timetables. As a result, they will find it hard to blend in the university’s study pace. In conclusion, a year off between high school and university is worth considering, but there are advantages and disadvantages of such phenomenon.
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to consider their future career. This would mean that they could schedule their future prospective and sharpen the
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skills
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is suitable.

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would mean a delay of new human resources.
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away from studying could
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to lose their study habits. It would be difficult for them to follow their usual timetables.
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to blend in the university’s study pace.

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there are advantages and disadvantages of such phenomenon.
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IELTS essay It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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