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It has become increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Some people think that a year off is just a waste of time while others believe that it is necessary. Discuss. v.2

It has become increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Some people think that a year off is just a waste of time while others believe that it is necessary. Discuss. v. 2
These days the trend of dropping a year after school and before joining university is becoming increasingly pronounced, which is a topic of contention among people. Some people believe that by doing this students are wasting time as it takes away a year of continuity from study bringing down their intellectual level, while others claim it to be highly important for the development of students allowing them a chance to explore a variety of options that they wish to take ahead in university, later. Further, the essay will discuss both the school of thoughts. On one hand, people hold a belief that when students miss a year after school, it is just wastage of time, nothing else because this creates a gap in their study bringing down their intellectual level by breaking the consistency. It is also believed that students start loosing their interest in their study by taking time off away from books. For example, when student takes an year off away from study, one is tend to enjoy their time by getting involved in their hobbies that they missed out while studying. This further detach him/her from studies and may end up not joining the university later. On the other hand, people claim that taking a year gap after school and university allow students to take out time for themselves and explore their interests in different fields, which will further which will further help them in making wise choices with regards to their courses in university. For Instance, this year gap allows students to have time to enroll in different short term internship programs run by different organizations to explore their fields of choices by getting their hands dirty on the field further making them confident about their career path that they will choose in university. To summarize, while some people consider missing a year as a sheer wastage of time considering the gap in study, others believe it to be the right choice helping them explore their fields of interests.
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are wasting
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as it takes away a
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year
of continuity from
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bringing down their intellectual level, while others claim it to be
highly
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important
for the development of
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students
allowing them a chance to
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explore
a variety of options that they wish to take ahead in
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university
, later.
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Further
, the essay will discuss both the
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school
of thoughts.

On one hand,
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people
hold a belief that when
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miss a
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after
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school
, it is
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just
wastage of
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, nothing else
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this creates a
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gap
in their
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study
bringing down their intellectual level by breaking the consistency. It is
also
believed that
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students
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start
loosing their interest in their
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by taking
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off away from books.
For example
, when
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student
takes
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an
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off away from
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, one is
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tend
to enjoy their
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time
by getting involved in their hobbies that they missed out while studying. This
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detach him/her from
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studies
and may
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end
up not joining the
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later.

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,
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claim that taking a
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year
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after
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and
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university
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allow
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to take out
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for themselves and
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their interests in
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, which will
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help
them in making wise choices
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with regards to
their courses in
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university
.
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, this
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allows
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to have
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to enroll in
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different
short term internship programs run by
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different
organizations to
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explore
their
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fields
of choices by getting their hands dirty on the
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field
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further
making them confident about their career path that they will choose in university.

To summarize
, while
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people
consider missing a
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year
as a sheer wastage of
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time
considering the
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in
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study
, others believe it to be the right choice helping them
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explore
their
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fields
of interests.
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58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It has become increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Some people think that a year off is just a waste of time while others believe that it is necessary. Discuss. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6.0
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