It is argued that more people should do a vocational training instead of going to university. Personally, I partly agree with this view.
On the one hand, people should be encouraged to become trained workders. Nowadays, following a vocational training would meet the needs of career because there is a lack of qualified workers in society. The number of building and house tends to increase and workers are vital when these constructions are built. This would help people choosing a vocaltional training have more opportunities to get job so that they can have a better living condition. With people who cannot enter universities or colleges, being a qualified worker prevents them to commit crime. Many crimes, such as pick pocket or burglar stem from unemployers who cannot pay for their living. Having a job like plumber or electrician help them earn money for the cost of living and therefore thay may not think about crime.
On the other hand, going to the university is still a better way to success. White- collar jobs are usually highly appreciated so people working in these areas can be promoted quickly in their careers. In some special area, learning academic knowledge in the university is essential before working. Doctors, for instance, need to learn the basic knowledge about human body before practising medcine. If not, they can make mistake leading to serious consequences such as making patients die.
In conclusion, I believe that both academic study and vocational training are necessary in modern society life.
It
is argued
that more
people
should do a vocational
training
instead
of going to
university
.
Personally
, I partly
agree
with this view.
On the one hand,
people
should
be encouraged
to become trained
workders
. Nowadays, following a vocational
training
would
meet
the needs of career
because
there is a lack of qualified workers in society. The number of building and
house
tends to increase and workers are vital when these constructions
are built
. This would
help
people
choosing a
vocaltional
training
have more opportunities to
get
job
so
that they can have a better living condition. With
people
who cannot enter
universities
or colleges, being a qualified worker
prevents
them to commit crime.
Many
crimes, such as pick pocket or burglar stem from
unemployers
who cannot pay for their living. Having a job like plumber or electrician
help
them earn money for the cost of living and
therefore
thay
may not
think
about crime.
On the other hand
, going to the
university
is
still
a better way to success. White- collar jobs are
usually
highly
appreciated
so
people
working in these areas can
be promoted
quickly
in their careers. In
some
special area, learning academic knowledge in the
university
is essential
before
working. Doctors,
for instance
, need to learn the basic knowledge about human body
before
practising
medcine
. If not, they can
make
mistake leading to serious consequences such as making patients
die
.
In conclusion
, I believe that both academic study and vocational
training
are necessary in modern society life.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes