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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and dis advantages? v.17

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and dis advantages? v. 17
In recent years, the tendency to experience a year break after high school graduation before starting a tertiary education become more popular in such a way many young high school leavers prefer to work or travel for a year before proceeding to the university. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Taking a gap year brings several benefits to students who are inexperienced and unskilful. To commence with, it provides ample time for those who are interested to enhance their abilities and master their skills like communication, foreign language and so forth. In addition, adolescents have a good chance to get some hands-on experience of the job. Moreover, a gap year provide an opportunity to travel around and become familiar with diverse cultures and beliefs that help them to broaden their horizon and improve their life skills. Finally, this period creates an avenue for them to discover their hidden passion and talent and find desired filed to pursue. On the flip side, there are various drawbacks to this phenomenon. To begin, if the planning goes not well, they will lose the track and waste their time. Thereby, the precious time that can spend to do productive activities in the university will be wasted at home. Meanwhile, it will be difficult for students to get used to academic timetables after a long gap. They will lose interest in studying and going to college every day. To sum up, this essay has discussed the benefits and drawbacks involved in having a gap year between leaving high school and university. After thorough analysis, it is necessary to weigh both sides, in order to decide on what works best for each individual.
In recent years, the tendency to experience a
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break after high school graduation
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before
starting a tertiary education become more popular in such a way
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many
young high
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school leavers
prefer to work or travel for a
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year
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before
proceeding to the university. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Taking a
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gap
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year
brings several benefits to students who
are inexperienced
and
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unskilful
. To commence with, it provides ample time for those who
are interested
to enhance their abilities and master their
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skills
like communication, foreign language and
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so
forth.
In addition
, adolescents have a
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good
chance to
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get
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some
hands-on experience of the job.
Moreover
, a
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gap
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year
provide an opportunity to travel around and become familiar with diverse cultures and beliefs that
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help
them to broaden their horizon and
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improve
their life
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skills
.
Finally
, this period creates an avenue for them to discover their hidden passion and talent and find desired filed to pursue.

On the flip side, there are various drawbacks to this phenomenon. To
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begin
, if the planning goes not well, they will lose the
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track
and waste their time. Thereby, the precious time that can spend to do productive activities in the university will
be wasted
at home. Meanwhile, it will be difficult for students to
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get
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used
to academic timetables after a long
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gap
. They will lose interest in studying and going to college every day.

To sum up, this essay has discussed the benefits and drawbacks involved in having a
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gap
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year
between leaving high school and university. After thorough analysis, it is necessary to weigh both sides, in order to decide on what works best for each individual.
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IELTS essay It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and dis advantages? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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