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More and more people think there is no need for printed newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

More and more people think there is no need for printed newspapers. v. 2
It is argued that nowadays, printed newspapers are not neccesary. While I agree that accessing information on the Internet is an easier way, I believe that printed newspapers still play an important roles in modern life. On the one hand, the development of the Internet makes printed newspapers less neccesary. Nowadays, the Internet is all the rage. It is a more convenient way to access information. With a laptop or smartphone connected to internet, people can read news everywhers, whenever they want and it does not cost anything. The internet is an unlimited source of infomation which can provide up-to-date news from different countries around the world and can satisfy the curiosity of readers. This is the reasons why many newspapers and magazines have their online version beside the printed one. On the other hand, printed newspapers still play an integral role in modern life. Articles in printed newspapers are usually written by professionals who may produce better writing than amateurs. Because of this, printed newspapers are a more truth- worthful sorce of news, compared with the internet where people are free to produce information. In addition, there are some people who may not like or unable to read news from the internet. Elderly, for instance, may not know how to use the internet to access information so that printed newspapers are the main source of information suitable for them. In conclusion, I believe that although the internet saw a significant development, printed newspapers are still neccesary in modern life.
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that nowadays,
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are not
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. While I
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agree
that accessing
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information
on the Internet is an easier way, I believe that
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printed
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newspapers
still
play an
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makes
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printed
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less
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neccesary
. Nowadays, the Internet is all the rage. It is a more convenient way to access
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information
. With a laptop or smartphone connected to internet,
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people
can read
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news
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everywhers
, whenever they want and it does not cost anything. The internet is an unlimited source of
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infomation
which can provide up-to-date
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news
from
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different
countries around the world and can satisfy the curiosity of readers. This is the reasons why
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many
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newspapers
and magazines have their online version beside the
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printed
one.

On the other hand
,
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printed
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newspapers
still
play an integral role in modern life. Articles in
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printed
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newspapers
are
usually
written by professionals who may produce better writing than amateurs.
Because of this
,
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printed
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newspapers
are a more truth-
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worthful
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sorce
of
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news
, compared with the internet where
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people
are free to produce
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information
.
In addition
, there are
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some
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people
who may not like or unable to read
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news
from the internet. Elderly,
for instance
, may not know how to
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use
the internet to access
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information
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so
that
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printed
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newspapers
are the main source of
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information
suitable for them.

In conclusion
, I believe that although the internet
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saw
a significant development,
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printed
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newspapers
are
still
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neccesary
in modern life.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people think there is no need for printed newspapers. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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