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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.37

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 37
The child upbringing is an essential process in order to make the betterment of the society. One of the highly controversial issues today relates to bringing up 0-12 aged people. To some extent, the proponents of family instruction face criticism from another group of people who thinks that children can instruct in school better than in family. I am going to discuss both points of view. This is surely a further significant factor that human learns every single detail with their family from birth. Children always start to mimic their parents and as well as other family members. By this means, a parental authorization is a first step to teach the codes of conduct, to avoid vices. Talking to and living with their children, parents hand down considerable moral rules and etiquettes to kids. Moreover, people will inculcate the knowledges in the future, which have imbibed since they were infants. For instance, a naughty child could not manage own treats regarding to common restricts, however, all classes do right manner. It is a fact that parents have an enormous time and quite opportunity to take off strict disciplinary measures. The teaching leads to us absorbing the life and Professional skills. Although, children come from various families and they practice the moral codes in the cooperation with other individuals. This aids to deal with the uncommon situations, additionally, making positive condition in the our world. Apart from this, student takes a long time during the whole education life. It means they are either observing around while they are taking the ground rules and a total convention. For instance, a dual-income family could not aside an enough time busying a child. Following this, the orphans and the care-needing children can also get an acceptable behaviour just through the right schooling. In the sum up, I am thinking it is universally accepted that both families and education have to rightfully attempt to instruct under 12 aged people together. It is sensible to conclude that studying may contribute to creditable manner than parents.
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make
the betterment of the society. One of the
highly
controversial issues
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today
relates to bringing up 0-12 aged
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people
. To
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some
extent, the proponents of
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family
instruction face criticism from another group of
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people
who
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thinks
that
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children
can instruct in school better than in
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family
. I am going to discuss both points of view.

This is
surely
a
further
significant factor that human learns every single detail with their
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family
from birth.
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Children
always
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start
to mimic their
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parents
and
as well
as other
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family
members. By this means, a parental authorization is a
first
step to teach the codes of conduct, to avoid vices. Talking to and living with their
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children
,
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parents
hand down considerable moral
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rules
and
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etiquettes
to kids.
Moreover
,
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people
will inculcate the
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knowledges
in the future, which have imbibed since they were infants.
For instance
, a naughty child could not manage
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own
treats
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regarding to
common restricts,
however
, all classes do right manner. It is a fact that
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parents
have an enormous time and quite opportunity to take off strict disciplinary measures.

The teaching leads to us absorbing the life and Professional
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skills
. Although,
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children
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come
from various
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families and
they practice the moral codes in the cooperation with other individuals. This aids to deal with the uncommon situations,
additionally
, making
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positive
condition in
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the our world
. Apart from this, student takes a long time during the whole education life. It means they are either observing around while they are taking the ground
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rules
and a total convention.
For instance
, a dual-income
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family
could not aside an
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enough
time busying a child. Following this, the orphans and the care-needing
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children
can
also
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get
an acceptable
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behaviour
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just
through the right schooling.

In the sum up, I am thinking it is
universally
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accepted
that both
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families
and education
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have to
rightfully
attempt to instruct under 12 aged
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people
together. It is sensible
to conclude
that studying may contribute to creditable manner than
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parents
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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