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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.1

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 1
There is no consensus as to how soon after school a person should go for higher education. However, these days, more and more people opt to stay off school for a year between secondary school and university. The benefits and drawbacks of this practice will be explained in this essay. On the one hand, taking a break off academic pursuits before higher education can help the student have some time to invest in money-making. The financial implication of attending a university can be quite burdensome and having time to make some money before studies begin will be a most welcome development for most people. For instance, a survey by Harvard campus-life journals showed that most first-year students made money doing some form of work before the academic session started. This example highlights one of the merits of taking time off before university life. Besides, the time before an academic program commences can be invested in learning more about the intended course of study, resulting in the student consequently having a better understanding of the discipline. An example of this is seen in medical students who sometimes take a year off before resumption to volunteer in hospitals. These students eventually have a higher pass rate than their colleagues. Again, this shows that the one year break before university studies begin can be of immense help to the student. On the other hand, there are a few setbacks to this trend that are worth considering. Firstly, the academic vacuum may be perceived as an opportunity to pursue things unrelated, and sometimes, unfortunately, inimical to the academic goals and future aspirations of the student. As an example, forty-five out of fifty university students who were questioned for their involvement in online scam said they were first introduced into it during their pre-university years, after secondary school, and as a result, their interest in academics began to wane. This instance goes to show how taking time off before university can expose the student to things that will eventually veer him or her off course. Moreover, the danger of exposure to unhealthy influence by peers is another significant demerit of this arrangement. Most students make friends during this period of academic life and are open to influence from such relationships, influences which may negatively impact their lives. In conclusion, although taking time off before university life starts has its merits, there are also setbacks to it. Individuals should take time to consider both sides before making a decision.
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after
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a person should go for higher education.
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people
opt to stay
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off
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school
for a
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year
between secondary
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school
and
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university
. The benefits and drawbacks of this practice will be
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explained
in this essay.

On the one hand, taking a break
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off
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academic
pursuits
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before
higher education can
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help
the
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have
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some
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time
to invest in money-making. The financial implication of attending a
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university
can be quite burdensome and having
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time
to
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make
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some
money
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studies
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will be a most welcome development for most
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people
.
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, a survey by Harvard campus-life journals
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showed
that most
first
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students
made money doing
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some
form of work
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before
the
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academic
session
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started
. This example highlights one of the merits of taking
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time
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off
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before
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university
life.
Besides
, the
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time
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before
an
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academic
program commences can
be invested
in learning more about the intended course of study, resulting in the
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student
consequently
having a better understanding of the discipline. An example of this is
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seen
in medical
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students
who
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sometimes
take a
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year
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off
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before
resumption to volunteer in hospitals. These
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students
eventually
have a higher pass rate than their colleagues. Again, this
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shows
that the one
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year
break
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before
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university
studies
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begin
can be of immense
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help
to the student.

On the other hand
, there are a few setbacks to this trend that are worth considering.
Firstly
, the
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academic
vacuum may
be perceived
as an opportunity to pursue things unrelated, and
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sometimes
, unfortunately, inimical to the
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academic
goals and future aspirations of the
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student
. As an example, forty-five out of fifty
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university
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students
who
were questioned
for their involvement in online scam said they were
first
introduced into it during their
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pre-university
years, after secondary
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school
, and
as a result
, their interest in
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academics
began to wane. This instance goes to
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show
how taking
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time
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off
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before
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university
can expose the
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student
to things that will
eventually
veer him or her
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off
course.
Moreover
, the
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danger
of exposure to unhealthy influence by peers is another significant demerit of this arrangement. Most
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students
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make
friends during this period of
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academic
life and are open to influence from such relationships, influences which may
negatively
impact their
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lives
.

In conclusion
, although taking
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time
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off
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before
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university
life
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starts
has its merits, there are
also
setbacks to it. Individuals should take
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time
to consider both sides
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before
making a decision.
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IELTS essay It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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