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It is a better for student to live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents to what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

It is a better for student to live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents v. 1
The choice of atmosphere in which a person wants to study varies person to person. A few prefer to study alone, away from their loved ones, while the other feels comfortable at home. Nevertheless the choice of study away from home suits best for one and I do accord with this notion fully. The following treatise will examine the reasons behind the same. It is better to study away from native place for several reasons. The first and foremost reason is the demand of the hour. In certain situations like, lack of study materials, arrangements can attribute to leave people their home town. To exemplify this, Some universities may not have faculty to teach subjects like Information technology or science, Therefore as a result individual who want to pursue in these subjects will eventually leave his native place to join other university away from their parents. Another compelling argument in this is the requirement of an individual's. In today's cut throat competition world, Masses not only required a degree to grab a job, but also the stature of institute matters. Companies like Amazone, Microsoft, Linkdin and Google prefer to hire people from well reputed institute, which consequently lead to numerous student to leave their native place and move to the city where the top rated university are situated. To elucidate it, "Indian Institute of Technology" is one of the famous institute in which every individual wants to study. As a result, to study in it people either have to move to Delhi or Mumbai. Furthermore, To be become independent one has to move from his comfort zone to experience the real essence of life. When a individual stays away from he get know many things like manage things their own like, finance, food and even their day to day work. To recapitulate it after contemplating it can be stated that, The circumstance and situation plane an essential role in the choice of a place of course. However application away from family in certain conditions is beneficial for the individual.
The choice of atmosphere in which a person wants to
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varies person to person. A few prefer to
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alone,
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away
from their
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loved
ones, while the other feels comfortable at home.
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Nevertheless
the choice of
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study
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away
from home suits best for one and I do accord with this notion
fully
. The following treatise will examine the reasons behind the same.

It is better to
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study
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away
from native
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place
for several reasons. The
first
and foremost reason is the demand of the hour. In certain situations like, lack of
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study
materials, arrangements can attribute to
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leave
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people
their home town. To exemplify this,
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Some
universities may not have faculty to teach subjects like Information technology or science,
Therefore
as a result
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individual
who want to pursue in these subjects will
eventually
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leave
his native
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place
to
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join
other university
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away
from their parents.

Another compelling argument in this is the requirement of an individual's. In
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today
's
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competition world, Masses not
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only
required a degree to grab a job,
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also
the stature of institute matters.
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Companies
like
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Amazone
, Microsoft,
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Linkdin
and Google prefer to hire
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people
from well reputed institute, which
consequently
lead to numerous student to
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leave
their native
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place
and
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move
to the city where the top rated university
are situated
. To elucidate it,
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"
Indian Institute of Technology
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"
is one of the
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famous
institute in which every
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individual
wants to
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study
.
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, to
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study
in it
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people
either
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have to
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move
to Delhi or Mumbai.

Furthermore
, To
be become
independent one
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has to
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move
from his comfort zone to experience the real essence of life. When
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a
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individual
stays
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away
from
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he
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get
know
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many
things like manage things their
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own
like, finance, food and even their
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day to day
work.

To recapitulate it after contemplating it can
be stated
that, The circumstance and situation
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plane
an essential role in the choice of a
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place
of course
.
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However
application
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away
from family in certain conditions is beneficial for the
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individual
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay It is a better for student to live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
339 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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