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Many people prefer to spend their holidays staying at home and doing things that they usually can’t do because of a busy schedule. Others, however, prefer to get away from their usual routine and prefer to spend time in a different location in a hotel, camping in the countryside or visiting other cities. Which one according to you is the better way of spending an ideal holiday? What are the benefits of going away on holidays? v.1

Many people prefer to spend their holidays staying at home and doing things that they usually can’t do because of a busy schedule. Others, however, prefer to get away from their usual routine and prefer to spend time in a different location in a hotel, camping in the countryside or visiting other cities. Which one according to you is the better way of spending an ideal holiday? What are the benefits of going away on holidays? v. 1
People in the society utilise holidays in many ways. Some people make use of holidays in travelling to other places, whereas others want to complete the incomplete works. This essay will discuss how the holidays are utilised by people and advantages of travelling on holidays. There are many benefits of travelling to other places on holidays. First and foremost, it gives us pleasure and peace of mind from our routine & busy life. A change is required for any person in his routine life; this gives satisfaction in his life. Secondly, we can meet many people while travelling and can explore many things, which helps to increase our social life. Finally, we are not machines to work all the time and this kind of going away and staying in hotels or camping gives immense pleasure, and this gives us the meaning of our life. However, others prefer to complete things which are incomplete. If every time we make use of holidays in travelling, it is difficult to complete our pending works, as we will be having a little time only for our personal works. For instance, these days, people work 24/7 and getting time for their personal works has become very difficult. If we make ourselves tired in travelling on holidays, it will be very hard to get time and rest, so the better way is to stay at home and take rest by just finishing off our pending works. In my opinion, there are many advantages of going away on holidays. For shorter period holidays, it is better to stay at home, but for longer period holidays, it is better to make use of going away, meeting new people and exploring new things. This will increase our social skills and it gets rid of our fears to travel. Also, it gives rest to our mind which is busy all the time in working and a pleasure for a depressed person. To conclude, we can utilise holidays in many ways but it is always better to go away if we have longer holidays, whereas, for shorter periods, it is better to complete pending works as we will be having very less time in our busy lives.
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IELTS essay Many people prefer to spend their holidays staying at home and doing things that they usually can’t do because of a busy schedule. Others, however, prefer to get away from their usual routine and prefer to spend time in a different location in a hotel, camping in the countryside or visiting other cities. Which one according to you is the better way of spending an ideal holiday? What are the benefits of going away on holidays? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
366 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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