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It has been said that people who read for pleasure have developed imaginations and gained better language skills than people who prefer watching TV. Do you agree or disagree v.1

It has been said that people who read for pleasure have developed imaginations and gained better language skills than people who prefer watching TV. v. 1
It is widely believed that having an interest in books exerts a much greater impact on boosting imaginary mind and gaining better language ability than glancing at programs on Television. In my opinion, I completely agree with this view thanks to the enormous benefits we can reap. Firstly, a reader can possess not only extensive knowledge but also creativity. Instead of including an illustration or vivid images which watchers have an idea of the characters or happening things, most written materials have a range of structures and abstract, thereby forcing people to pick up their brains to figure out situations narrated if they want to keep up with the plot. As a result, they are likely to enhance their creative thought which animated video fails to bring. Secondly, people having a passion for books are likely to gain a deeper understanding of the skill of language. Unlike video which utilizes a majority of spoken words, written sources such as literature provide a formal word and require readers to pay much attention to analyze their underlying meanings, improving their writing skills and better mastering language. Expressing their thoughts and emotions in much wiser and more logical format is as a result of applying knowledge from the book. For example, my friend, a bookworm, can show her thought further better than the others in my class. In conclusion, reading a book plays a vital role in shaping creativity and possessing better language skills. Therefore, it is highly recommended that each individual should form a habit of reading daily.
It is
widely
believed that having an interest in
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books
exerts a much greater impact on boosting imaginary mind and gaining
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better
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language
ability than glancing at programs on

Television. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with this view thanks to the enormous benefits we can reap.

Firstly
, a reader can possess not
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only
extensive knowledge
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but
also
creativity.
Instead
of including an illustration or vivid images which watchers have an
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idea
of the characters or happening things, most written materials have a range of structures and abstract, thereby forcing
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people
to pick up their brains to figure out situations narrated if they want to
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keep
up with the plot.
As a result
, they are likely to enhance their creative
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thought
which animated video fails to bring.

Secondly
,
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people
having a passion for
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books
are likely to gain a deeper understanding of the
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skill
of
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language
. Unlike video which utilizes a majority of spoken words, written sources such as literature provide a formal word and require readers to pay much attention to analyze their underlying meanings, improving their writing
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skills
and
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better
mastering
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language
. Expressing their thoughts and emotions in much wiser and more logical format is
as a result
of applying knowledge from the
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book
.
For example
, my friend, a bookworm, can
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show
her
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thought
further
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better
than the others in my
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class
.

In conclusion
, reading a
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book
plays a vital role in shaping creativity and possessing
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better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
Therefore
, it is
highly
recommended that each individual should form a habit of reading daily.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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The conquest of learning is achieved through the knowledge of languages.
Roger Bacon

IELTS essay It has been said that people who read for pleasure have developed imaginations and gained better language skills than people who prefer watching TV. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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