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It has been said that people who read for pleasure have developed imaginations and gained better language skills than people who prefer watching TV. Do you agree or disagree v.3

It has been said that people who read for pleasure have developed imaginations and gained better language skills than people who prefer watching TV. v. 3
It is widely believed that having an interest on books exerts much greater impact on boosting imaginary mind and gaining better language ability than glancing at programs on Television. In my opinion, I completely agree with this view thanks to the enormous benefits we can reap. Firstly, a reader can possess not only extensive knowlege, but also creativity. Instead of including illustration or vivid images which watchers have an idea of the characters or happening things, most written materials have a range of structures and abstract, thereby forcing people to pick up their brain with a view to figuring out situations narruted if they want to keep up with plot. As a result, they are likely to enhance their creative thought which animated video fails to bring. Secondly, people having a passion for books are likely to gain a deeper understanding on the skill of language. Unlike video which utilize a majority of spoken words, written sources such as literature provide a formal word and require readers to pay much attention to analyse their underlying meanings, improving their writing skills and better mastering language. Expressing their thoughts and emotions in much wiser and more logical format is as a result of applying knowledge from book. For example, my friend, a bookworm, has the ability to show her thought further better than the others in my class. In conclusion, reading a book plays a vital role on shaping creativy and possessing better language skills. Therefore, it is highly recommended that each individual should form a habit of reading on their daily basis.
It is
widely
believed that having an interest on
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books
exerts much greater impact on boosting imaginary mind and gaining
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better
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language
ability than glancing at programs on

Television. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with this view thanks to the enormous benefits we can reap.

Firstly
, a reader can possess not
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only
extensive
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knowlege
,
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but
also
creativity.
Instead
of including illustration or vivid images which watchers have an
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idea
of the characters or happening things, most written materials have a range of structures and abstract, thereby forcing
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people
to pick up their brain with a view to figuring out situations
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narruted
if they want to
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keep
up with plot.
As a result
, they are likely to enhance their creative
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thought
which animated video fails to bring.

Secondly
,
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people
having a passion for
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books
are likely to gain a deeper understanding on the
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skill
of
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language
. Unlike video which utilize a majority of spoken words, written sources such as literature provide a formal word and require readers to pay much attention to
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analyse
their underlying meanings, improving their writing
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skills
and
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better
mastering
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language
. Expressing their thoughts and emotions in much wiser and more logical format is
as a result
of applying knowledge from
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book
.
For example
, my friend, a bookworm, has the ability to
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show
her
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thought
further
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better
than the others in my
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class
.

In conclusion
, reading a
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book
plays a vital role on shaping
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creativy
and possessing
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better
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language
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skills
.
Therefore
, it is
highly
recommended that each individual should form a habit of reading on their daily basis.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It has been said that people who read for pleasure have developed imaginations and gained better language skills than people who prefer watching TV. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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