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Individual can do nothing to improve the environment. Only government and large companies make a difference. To what extent do you agree and disagree. v.1

Individual can do nothing to improve the environment. Only government and large companies make a difference. v. 1
It is irrefutable that protecting environment is very important for our survival. Some people argue that individual cannot contribute to it and it is the responsibility of government and big companies. I completely disagree with this view. Every person can make a difference and every step count. In this essay I shall put forth my arguments to support my views. To begin with, nowadays major threat to nature is plastic. Each and every items we use day today contains plastic, which stays forever in land scape. Even though many countries has banned the use of this, still it is not 100% successful until people stop using it. What if an individual take an oath to carry their own cloth bag to buy groceries? This is more effective than some other body forcing not to do so. In other words, when people realize the importance of protecting mother earth, that it will make a massive difference. Secondly, another major problem currently we are encountering is air pollution and poor quality of air to breath. Major contributor to this issue is, big industries and increase in the number of vehicles on the road. Last month Delhi, capital city of India altered with very poor quality of air. So how can we mitigate this problem? when people start using a public transport to commute to office or any other place, there will be a drastic drop in the vehicle on road and which will automatically improve the air quality. In addition to it, nowadays most of the people volunteering themselves to clean the beaches and lakes which is a good movement. To conclude, it is merely very difficult for the state bodies and other organization to take care of the environment completely. It is equal responsibility of an individual to join hand with the government for the improvement of environment. This can make a colossal difference to make an earth to better place to live.
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for our survival.
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Some
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people
argue that individual cannot contribute to it and it is the responsibility of
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government
and
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big
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companies
. I completely disagree with this view. Every person can
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make
a difference and every step count. In this essay I shall put forth my arguments to support my views.

To
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begin
with, nowadays major threat to nature is plastic. Each and every
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items
we
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use
day
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today
contains plastic, which stays forever in
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land scape
.
Even though
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many
countries has banned the
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use
of this,
still
it is not 100% successful until
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people
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stop
using it. What if an individual take an oath to carry their
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own
cloth bag to
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buy
groceries? This is more effective than
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some
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other
body forcing not to do
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. In
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other
words, when
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people
realize the importance of protecting mother earth, that it will
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make
a massive difference.

Secondly
, another major problem
currently
we are encountering is
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air
pollution and poor quality of
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air
to breath. Major contributor to this issue is,
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big
industries and increase in the number of vehicles on the road. Last month Delhi, capital city of India altered with
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very
poor quality of
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air
.
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So
how can we mitigate this problem?
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when
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people
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start
using
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a public transport
to commute to office or any
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other
place, there will be a drastic drop in the vehicle on road and which will
automatically
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improve
the
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air
quality.
In addition
to it, nowadays most of the
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people
volunteering themselves to clean the beaches and lakes which is a
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good
movement.

To conclude
, it is
merely
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very
difficult for the state bodies and
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other
organization to take care of the environment completely. It is equal responsibility of an individual to
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join
hand with the
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government
for the improvement of environment. This can
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make
a colossal difference to
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make
an earth to better place to
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live
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Individual can do nothing to improve the environment. Only government and large companies make a difference. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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