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It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books. ” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v.5

It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books. ” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v. 5
Weddings, undoubtedly, are becoming more lavish day by day. Some believe this extravaganza cause a financial burden and unnecessary stress on the future couples and I completely agree with this statement. Firstly, in order to afford grand weddings, new couples and their families normally undertake big loans or use their long time savings. This is because by doing so, they feel integrated in their society and they will not carry the stigma of being poor or stingy. For instance, in India, when girls are married, their parents use all the money that they have been saving for years into their big day. Had they done a small marriage, depending on their affordability, that money could have been used in a more useful and productive way. Secondly, large parties come with enormous stressful moments. In an aim to have everything perfectly set up in a short span of time, future brides and grooms do not enjoy these days as much as they should have been. To exemplify, new couples trying to imitate big fat weddings, spend lots of their time looking for perfect caterers along with event planners so that nothing goes amiss. Had they spent this time together, they would have had the chance to know one another which could have helped them in the future life. In conclusion, despite big weddings make people feel socially prestigious, it does not outweigh the negative impacts that it causes on future husbands and wives. The money and time spent could have been made more fruitful and rewarding in the future.
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Weddings
,
undoubtedly
, are becoming more lavish day by day.
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Some
believe this extravaganza cause a financial burden and unnecessary
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stress
on the
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future
couples and I completely
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agree
with this statement.

Firstly
, in order to afford grand
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weddings
, new couples and their families
normally
undertake
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big
loans or
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use
their long
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time
savings. This is
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because
by doing
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so
, they feel integrated in their
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society and
they will not carry the stigma of being poor or stingy.
For instance
, in India, when girls
are married
, their parents
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use
all the money that they have been saving for years into their
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big
day. Had they done a
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small
marriage, depending on their affordability, that money could have been
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used
in a more useful and productive way.

Secondly
, large parties
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come
with enormous stressful moments. In an aim to have everything
perfectly
set up in a short span of
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time
,
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future
brides and grooms do not enjoy these days as much as they should have been. To exemplify, new couples trying to imitate
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big
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fat
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weddings
, spend lots of their
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time
looking for perfect caterers along with
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event
planners
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so
that nothing goes amiss. Had they spent this
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time
together, they would have had the chance to know one another which could have
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helped
them in the
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future
life.

In conclusion
, despite
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big
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weddings
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make
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people
feel
socially
prestigious, it does not outweigh the
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negative
impacts that it causes on
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future
husbands and wives. The money and
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time
spent could have
been made
more fruitful and rewarding in the
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future
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books. ” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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