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It has been observed that in many countries there are not enough students choosing to study science subjects at university What do you think are causes of the problem Are there any effects on society v.2

It has been observed that in many countries there are not enough students choosing to study science subjects at university What do you think are causes of the problem Are there any effects on society v. 2
In recent years, we have seen an alarming increase in the number of students losing passion for science subjects. This essay will discuss the reasons for this and its impacts on society. There are many reasons why fewer students are choosing to study science as their major subjects. First of all, these subjects are increasingly difficult and require students put a lot of effort into their study. For instance, a physics student has to do several projects and does not have free time to relax. Furthermore, this subject knowledge is quite abstract and theoretical. Therefore, students feel it so boring and dry that they do not want to study science. Thirdly, low remuneration for science industry is a factor associated with declining number of scientific students. According to many research reports, the salary of scientists is much less than lawyers or businessmen. Due to the fact of declining number of scientific students, it can have negative effects on our society. A shortage of scientific talents leads to the lack of employees working in these areas. As a result, the development of science and technology would be slack which affects the quality of people’s life. In addition, while the rapidly increasing number of students choosing other subjects such as law, economics, business, medicine and so on, the number of jobs in these areas is limited. Therefore, a huge number of graduated college students would have to face unemployment. In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for declining scientific students, and steps need to be taken to tackle this problem.
In recent years, we have
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number
of
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losing passion for
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science
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subjects
. This essay will discuss the reasons for this and its impacts on society.

There are
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reasons why fewer
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students
are choosing to study
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science
as their major
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subjects
.
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, these
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subjects
are
increasingly
difficult and require
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students
put
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a lot of
effort into their study.
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, a physics
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student
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has to
do several projects and does not have free time to relax.
Furthermore
, this
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subject
knowledge is quite abstract and theoretical.
Therefore
,
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students
feel it
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so
boring and dry that they do not want to study
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science
.
Thirdly
, low remuneration for
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science
industry is a factor associated with declining
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number
of
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scientific
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students
. According to
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many
research reports, the salary of scientists is much less than lawyers or businessmen.

Due to the fact of declining
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number
of
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scientific
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students
, it can have
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negative
effects on our society. A shortage of
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scientific
talents leads to the lack of employees working in these areas.
As a result
, the development of
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science
and technology would be slack which affects the quality of
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people
’s life.
In addition
, while the
rapidly
increasing
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number
of
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students
choosing other
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subjects
such as law, economics, business, medicine and
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so
on, the
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number
of jobs in these areas
is limited
.
Therefore
, a huge
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number
of
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graduated
college
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students
would
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have to
face unemployment.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that there are various reasons for declining
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scientific
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students
, and steps need to
be taken
to tackle this problem.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It has been observed that in many countries there are not enough students choosing to study science subjects at university What do you think are causes of the problem Are there any effects on society v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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