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School should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

School should not force children to learn a foreign language. v. 2
It is argued that children should not be force to study a foreign language at school. Although I believe that learning another language is important, I completely argee that children should be encouraged to learn a foreign language, not to be forced to learn it. On the one hand, it is undeniable that learning other languages is very useful for children. Knowing different language help children have better chances in studying and working in the future. For example, th most important textbook and journals now are in English so Vietnamese students who are good at English may access to these materials easier, leading to a better result of studying. Fluence in many languages is also a benefit when people applying for a job. In addition, learning other languages help children understand more about different traditions and cultures, which may encourage mutual understanding between people in different nations and promote the globalisation. On the other hand, children should not be forced to study a foreign language because of many reasons. Firstly, learning under the pressure does not lead to a good result of studying to children. In turn children who have to learn what they do not like may not only feel stressful but also lose their passion and motivation in studying languages and other subjects as well. Secondly some children do not have a natural ability to learn languages, instead, they are very good at other areas such as scienes or art. Such children shoud be encouraged to study what they are good at in order to have better development, instead of being forced to learn what they are unable to do. In conclusion, I believe that learning a foreign language is important but it should be considered as an optional subject, not as a compulsory subject for children.
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at school. Although I believe that
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other
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languages
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useful for
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children
. Knowing
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different
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language
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help
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children
have better chances in
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studying
and working in the future.
For example
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most
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textbook and journals
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are in English
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so
Vietnamese students who are
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good
at English may access to these materials easier, leading to a better result of
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studying
.
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in
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languages
is
also
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people
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,
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other
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languages
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children
understand more about
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different
traditions and cultures, which may encourage mutual understanding between
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people
in
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nations and promote the
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globalisation
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On the
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hand,
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children
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to study a
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language
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result of
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what they do not like may not
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feel stressful
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areas such as
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children
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be encouraged
to study what they are
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instead
of
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to
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what they are unable to do.

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, I believe that
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but
it should
be considered
as an optional subject, not as a compulsory subject for
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children
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12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay School should not force children to learn a foreign language. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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