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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion. v.793

Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion. v. 793
Modern transportation and shipping has turned around the life style of every individual splendidly. Things are a lot easier to access with the invention of many modern technologies that has led to modern transportation. I completely agree with the given claim-Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live-because of the reasons stated in the body paragraphs. First and foremost, we save a hell lot of time in the current era than we used to in the past with the advent of modern transportation. Nothing is beyond reach or impractical with current transportation. For an instance, previously with only horse ride or bullock carts, reaching from one state to another was a few days to week process and people mostly had to avoid it to save their time. But, now with the aeroplanes, non stop trains, this time has shrinked to a day. In addition to saving our time, the transportation in the current era has made travel easier and more fun. When it comes to easier, earlier people working too far from their family would almost loose touch with them because of the difficulty involved in the travel to their loved once. But, now they can just take a flight and travel to and forth their home with minimum or no hassle. International travel has become a common thing for most of us to spend our vacation. Admittedly, when travel is so easy, one would ultimately enjoy doing it. Lastly, I would say modern transportation has contributed to increase employement in a noteworthy way. For an example, we have public buses, cabs, autos in our city that has hired a prodigious number of drivers to adhere to public comfort. There are so many travel companies like SRL, Indigo, OLA cabs, etc which hire people in numbers to assist and help common public to travel from one place to another. Hence, modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live in by saving our time, making travel fun and creating new jobs. These are clearly supported by the examples provided in the above paragraphs.
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transportation
and shipping has turned around the life style of every individual
splendidly
. Things are a lot easier to access with the invention of
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many
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modern
technologies that has led to
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modern
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transportation
. I completely
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agree
with the
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given
claim-Modern
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transportation
and shipping has made the world a better place to
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live
-
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because
of the reasons stated in the body paragraphs.

First
and foremost, we save a hell lot of
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time
in the
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current
era than we
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used
to in the past with the advent of
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modern
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transportation
. Nothing is beyond reach or impractical with
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current
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transportation
. For an instance, previously with
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only
horse ride or bullock carts, reaching from one state to another was a few days to week process and
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people
mostly
had to avoid it to save their
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time
.
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But
,
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now
with the
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aeroplanes
, non
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stop
trains, this
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time
has
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shrinked
to a day.

In addition
to saving our
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time
, the
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transportation
in the
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current
era has made
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travel
easier and more fun. When it
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comes
to easier, earlier
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people
working too far from their family would almost loose touch with them
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because
of the difficulty involved in the
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travel
to their
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loved
once.
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But
,
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now
they can
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just
take a flight and
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travel
to and forth their home with minimum or no hassle. International
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travel
has become a common thing for most of us to spend our vacation.
Admittedly
, when
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travel
is
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so
easy, one would
ultimately
enjoy doing it.

Lastly
, I would say
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modern
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transportation
has contributed to increase
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employement
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in a noteworthy way
. For an example, we have public buses, cabs, autos in our city that has hired a prodigious number of drivers to adhere to public comfort. There are
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so
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many
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travel
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companies
like
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SRL
, Indigo, OLA cabs, etc which hire
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people
in numbers to assist and
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help
common public to
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travel
from one place to another.

Hence
,
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modern
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transportation
and shipping has made the world a better place to
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live
in by saving our
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time
, making
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travel
fun and creating new jobs. These are
clearly
supported by the examples provided in the above paragraphs.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion. v. 793

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
352 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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