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It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.5

It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. v. 5
In today' s world of work, it is a widely held perception that older employees lack the capability of adopting to the new work patterns and thus companies ought to employ younger workers. I, however, hold a different opinion that elderlies still have a significant role to play in the contemporary workplaces. In this essay, I will endeavour to justify my point and draw a conclusion thereof. First and foremost, it is scientifically proven that flexing to changes is a matter of personality type rather than age. In fact, old employees can be adroit to be responsive to the new working process as well as younger workers. My 57-year-old uncle who works in a local bank can be a good example for this case. Despite his old age, he can compete with his young collaegues one-handedly in a company where dramatic alterations frequently occur. Secondly, mature workforce in the workplace could be an invaluable tool. Senior employees' long-year experiences and managerial skills will be considerably benigicial to teach young workers how to cope with different situations at work. For instance, the vast majority big companies are now striving to keep their old staff in the team in order to polish up the immature members of the job market. Yet, there are some induviduals who claim that youngesters are more preferable in employment as they are with the most enthusiasism and energy. Nonetheless, these could not possibly be directod into a best use without experienced workers' practical tutorials. In conclusion, it is obvious that younger workers are claimed to be more suitable to the new changes at work. Nevertheless, I assert that it is crucial for companies to have older staff to put the young employees into the right path.
In
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today&
#039; s world of
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work
, it is a
widely
held perception that older
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employees
lack the capability of adopting to the new
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work
patterns and
thus
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companies
ought to employ younger
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workers
. I,
however
, hold a
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different
opinion that
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elderlies
still
have a significant role to play in the contemporary workplaces. In this essay, I will
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endeavour
to justify my point and draw a conclusion thereof.

First
and foremost, it is
scientifically
proven that flexing to
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changes
is a matter of personality type
rather
than age. In fact,
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old
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employees
can be adroit to be responsive to the new working process
as well
as younger
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workers
. My 57-year-
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old
uncle who works in a local bank can be a
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good
example for this case. Despite his
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old
age, he can compete with his young
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collaegues
one-
handedly
in a
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company
where dramatic alterations
frequently
occur.

Secondly
, mature workforce in the workplace could be an invaluable tool. Senior
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employees&
#039; long-year experiences and managerial
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skills
will be
considerably
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benigicial
to teach young
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workers
how to cope with
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different
situations at
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work
.
For instance
, the vast majority
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big
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companies
are
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now
striving to
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keep
their
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old
staff in the team in order to polish up the immature members of the job market.

Yet
, there are
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some
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induviduals
who claim that
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youngesters
are more preferable in employment as they are with the most
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enthusiasism
and energy. Nonetheless, these could not
possibly
be
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directod
into
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a
best
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use
without experienced
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workers&
#039; practical tutorials.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that younger
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workers
are claimed
to be more suitable to the new
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changes
at
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work
.
Nevertheless
, I assert that it is crucial for
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companies
to have older staff to put the young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
into the right path.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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