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Has technology made our lives easier or more complicated? v.1

Has technology made our lives easier or more complicated? v. 1
We are living in the world of technology nowadays. It has changed almost all aspects of our lives like food, education, health care and travelling etc. Although, it has numerous advantages, yet has some drawbacks too. It is saving our time by automating tedious and time consuming tasks. Cooking is easier these days with electric stoves and microwave ovens than ancient times when people used to burn fire with wood. Food can be preserved for many days in refrigerators. It is helping us to construct modern and comfortable houses and buildings. It has brought a revolution in the field of education, information and communication. Sharing of knowledge with friends or family has become a matter of seconds using social media or mobile phones. One can find desired material by just clicking a button instead of personally going to the library or some place. Students can read helpful resources online from a variety of sources, which enables them to enhance their knowledge and capabilities. Today, it has made distance learning and remote working possible to save time and travelling costs. It has equipped us with better health care systems. It’s possible to diagnose and cure complicated diseases with the help of machines like x-ray, laser and radiology. Travelling around the globe is effortless these days with the invention of the aeroplane. It’s possible to travel the distance of days into hours. It is a double edged sword. It can be terrible for human lives, if not utilized ethically. Financial theft and frauds or very common these days. In case of failure, technology may become dangerous for our lives. For example, sudden failure of the breaks of the vehicle could be the reason of an accident. We are highly dependant on devices these days. Pilots depend upon the navigation systems installed in aeroplane to get instructions from control rooms. A little fault in technical system may end the precious lives of passengers. A bomb can kill many innocent people. In the end, I would like to say that living without machinery is like a fish out of water. It has brought countless advantages to our lives. Anyhow, we should encourage the positive utilization of equipment to bring colours in the lives of human being.
We are living in the world of technology nowadays. It has
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changed
almost all aspects of our
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lives
like food, education, health care and travelling etc. Although, it has numerous advantages,
yet
has
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some
drawbacks too.

It is saving our
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time
by automating tedious and
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time consuming
tasks. Cooking is easier these days with electric stoves and microwave ovens than ancient
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times
when
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people
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used
to burn fire with wood. Food can
be preserved
for
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many
days in refrigerators. It is helping us to construct modern and comfortable
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houses
and buildings.

It has brought a revolution in the field of education, information and communication. Sharing of knowledge with friends or family has become a matter of seconds using social media or mobile phones. One can find desired material by
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just
clicking a button
instead
of
personally
going to the library or
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some
place. Students can read helpful resources online from a variety of sources, which enables them to enhance their knowledge and capabilities.
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Today
, it has made distance learning and remote working possible to save
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time
and travelling costs.

It has equipped us with better health care systems. It’s possible to diagnose and cure complicated diseases with the
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help
of machines like x-ray, laser and radiology. Travelling around the globe is effortless these days with the invention of the
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aeroplane
. It’s possible to travel the distance of days into hours.

It is a
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double edged
sword.
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It
can be terrible for human
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lives
, if not utilized
ethically
. Financial theft and frauds or
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very
common these days. In case of failure, technology may become
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dangerous
for our
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lives
.
For example
, sudden failure of the breaks of the vehicle could be the reason of an accident. We are
highly
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dependant
on devices these days. Pilots depend upon the navigation systems installed in
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aeroplane
to
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get
instructions from control rooms. A
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little
fault in technical system may
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end
the precious
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lives
of passengers. A bomb can kill
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many
innocent
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people
.

In the
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end
, I would like to say that living without machinery is like a fish out of water. It has brought countless advantages to our
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lives
. Anyhow, we should encourage the
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positive
utilization of equipment to bring
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colours
in the
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lives
of human being.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Has technology made our lives easier or more complicated? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
372 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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