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Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on ateam or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples tosupport your answer. v.2

Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on ateam or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples tosupport your answer. v. 2
People have different ways to work. This has been determined by old experiences. For instance, some people had succeeded by working on a team, so they prefer to work with others. On the other hand, a person who has had more benefits of the solo method of working will keep working by himself. In my view, working in groups offers more advantages than its counterpart for a few reasons. First, individuals have the opportunity to learn from others. Thus, people share knowledge and experience when working in collaboration with others. For example, a person is able to learn from the older employees of a company when starting as new. The rest of the coworkers will explain the way and method use in the job. Older labors tend to explain how the duties have to be finished. Moreover, one is capable to improve or develop new skills by cooperation. For instance, when I stared in my first job, I did not speak English as well I speak now. Although I am still learning, my coworkers have helped me and facilitated this process. If a person work individually did not have the opportunity to learn from others as I have done. In addition, collaboration also enables people to work faster and more efficient. If a group of people decided to finish a project, they would share tasks, which would reduce time. For example, I work as a Vet Tech in an animal Hospital. In my company all the employees work in groups. When a client arrives at work, one person goes to the room to get the clinical history by the time the rest prepares the injections and the procedures. Since we cooperate with each other, we usually finish faster, so all the group goes home earlier. Furthermore, working in groups improves efficiency. Because more people asses the project, it feels less stress. If a person does something wrong, another employee will catch it and solve it. Consequently, the work is finished perfectly with no errors. If an individual works alone, he will finish the same work later and probably with more errors to be evaluated. To sum up, the benefits working alone surpass the disadvantages. In groups people not only learn from others, but they also finish the work faster being more efficient than any individual working alone could be.
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who has had more benefits of the solo method of
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by himself. In my view,
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in
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groups
offers more advantages than its counterpart for a few reasons.

First
, individuals have the opportunity to
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learn
from others.
Thus
,
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people
share knowledge and experience when
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working
in collaboration with others.
For example
, a
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person
is able to
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learn
from the older employees of a
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company
when starting as new. The rest of the coworkers will
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explain
the way and method
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use
in the job. Older labors tend to
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explain
how the duties
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have to
be finished
.
Moreover
, one is capable to
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improve
or develop new
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skills
by cooperation.
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, when I stared in my
first
job, I did not speak English
as well
I speak
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now
. Although I am
still
learning, my coworkers have
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helped
me and facilitated this process. If a
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person
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work
individually
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learn
from others as I have done.

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faster and more efficient. If a
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a project, they would share tasks, which would
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reduce
time.
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, I
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work
as a Vet Tech in an animal Hospital. In my
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company
all the employees
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work
in
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groups
. When a client arrives at
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work
, one
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goes to the room to
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the clinical history by the time the rest prepares the injections and the procedures. Since we cooperate with each
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faster,
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all the
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goes home earlier.
Furthermore
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improves
efficiency.
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asses the project, it feels less
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. If a
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does something
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, another employee will catch it and solve it.
Consequently
, the
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is finished
perfectly
with no errors. If an individual works alone, he will
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the same
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later and
probably
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.

To sum up, the benefits
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alone surpass the disadvantages. In
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groups
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not
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faster being more efficient than any individual
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alone could be.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on ateam or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples tosupport your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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