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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Students learn better when they are not threatened with possible failure. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v.656

Students learn better when they are not threatened with possible failure. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 656
Learning is a complex mental process. There are some key factors contributing to efficient learning. One of them is mental security. It influence positively on the quality of learning and boost the mental capacity of students for digesting new and complicated subjects. Today, it is obvious that creativity plays a prominent role in thorough understanding of new subjects and in solving related problems. Creativity deeply rooted in risk-taking ability of people. Those who dare to take the risk of doing things in different ways will grow their creative capabilities. Therefore, students who are not threatened by the consequences of their failure will have the courage to take the risk of choosing creative measures in learning a subject matter. In addition, failure is the gateway to success because it provides a valuable experience about how not to do a job. Failure should not be a threatening force for those who are learning. In contrary, it is necessary to see it as a part of one' s education. Whenever we lose, we learn how to remove a downfall and pass a situation through success. I remember once I made some terrible mistakes on a class quiz that constituted a part of my final grade. However, I took the lesson and next time, in final exam, I easily handled the similar questions. Moreover, students who are not afraid of being pictured as losers or being scorned because of their possible failures are more willing to freely ask questions from the teachers and share ideas with their classmates. This will help them to correct their errant ideas and achieve a better understanding of what they are learning. In conclusion, I would like to indicate that feeling secure is an undeniable requirement for having a creative mind, ready to take risks. It encourages the learners to ask the obscure aspects of a subject without feeling shame. Students should perceive any failure as a positive factor, which will enhance their chance of future success. Thus, I strongly agree that students will learn better when they are not threatened with possible failures.
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some
key factors contributing to efficient
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learning
. One of them is mental security. It
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influence
positively
on the quality of
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learning
and boost the mental capacity of
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students
for digesting new and complicated subjects.

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deeply
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risk
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people
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who
dare to take the
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risk
of doing things in
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different
ways will grow their creative capabilities.
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,
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students
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who
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failure
will have the courage to take the
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risk
of choosing creative measures in
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learning
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subject matter
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,
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is the gateway to success
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because
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class
quiz that constituted a part of my final grade.
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, I took the lesson and
next
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easily
handled the similar questions.

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,
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students
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who
are not afraid of
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as losers or
being scorned
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because
of their possible
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failures
are more willing to
freely
ask questions from the teachers and share
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ideas
with their classmates. This will
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help
them to correct their errant
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ideas
and achieve a better understanding of what they are learning.

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, I would like to indicate that feeling secure is an undeniable requirement for having a creative mind, ready to take
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risks
. It encourages the learners to ask the obscure aspects of a subject without feeling shame.
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should perceive any
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failure
as a
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positive
factor, which will enhance their chance of future success.
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students
will learn better when they are not threatened with possible
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failures
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IELTS essay Students learn better when they are not threatened with possible failure. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 656

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
345 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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