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Both large cars and small cars have their advantages and disadvantages. Write about some of those advantages. State which type of car you prefer and why? v.2

Both large cars and small cars have their advantages and disadvantages. Write about some of those advantages. State which type of car you prefer and why? v. 2
When it comes to buy a car, people should consider which type of vehicle is suitable for them. The size of a car is an important factor. I personally prefer small sized car because it consume less fuel, it is more economical, and rather appropriate for urban areas. Since small cars are less heavy than large ones, their engine needs to produce lesser amount of mechanical pull. Consequently, their fuel usage is moderate comparing to heavy vehicles. The less the fossil fuel is burned by a combustion engine, the less green house gases will be released to the atmosphere. In addition, the green cars, which do not emit pollutant exhaust gases, are produced in small scales in order to minimize their energy consumption. This makes small cars even more favorable, specifically to people who are fond of green acts, than the large cars. Furthermore, considering the expense of filling up a gas tank, lower need for fossil fuel in small cars leads to relatively lower expenditure. The amount of money saves up in this way can be spend on, for example, going to a trip or renting a good apartment flat. Finally, a small car is very convenient for urban areas because it takes less space. Finding a park place is very easy when the full length of a care is less than two meters. Parking a large car in a fully packed parking area is like a nightmare. Moreover, city traffic is often heavy, especially during rush hours. A small size car will manage better to escape from the jam than a huge car. In summary, car manufacturing should respond to the needs of all potential customers. However, for urban dweller like me the best choice of automobile is the one with the minimum need for fuel which can easily do maneuver in crowded streets. Thus, I prefer having a small car.
When it
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to
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buy
a
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car
,
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people
should consider which type of vehicle is suitable for them. The size of a
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car
is an
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important
factor. I
personally
prefer
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small
sized
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car
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because
it
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consume
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less
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fuel
, it is more economical, and
rather
appropriate for urban areas.

Since
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small
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cars
are
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less
heavy than large ones, their engine
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needs
to produce lesser amount of mechanical pull.
Consequently
, their
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fuel
usage is moderate comparing to heavy vehicles. The
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less
the fossil
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fuel
is burned
by a combustion engine, the
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less
green
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house
gases will
be released
to the atmosphere.
In addition
, the green
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cars
, which do not emit pollutant exhaust gases,
are produced
in
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small
scales in order to minimize their energy consumption. This
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makes
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small
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cars
even more favorable,
specifically
to
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people
who are fond of green acts, than the large cars.

Furthermore
, considering the expense of filling up a gas tank, lower
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need
for fossil
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fuel
in
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small
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cars
leads to
relatively
lower expenditure. The amount of money saves up in this way can be
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spend
on,
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,
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going to a trip
or renting a
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good
apartment flat.

Finally
, a
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small
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car
is
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very
convenient for urban areas
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because
it takes
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less
space. Finding a park place is
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very
easy when the full length of a care is
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less
than two meters. Parking a large
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car
in a
fully
packed parking area is like a nightmare.
Moreover
, city traffic is
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often
heavy,
especially
during rush hours. A
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small
size
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car
will manage better to escape from the jam than a huge car.

In summary,
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car
manufacturing should respond to the
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needs
of all potential customers.
However
, for urban dweller like me the best choice of automobile is the one with the minimum
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need
for
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fuel
which can
easily
do maneuver in crowded streets.
Thus
, I prefer having a
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small
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car
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Both large cars and small cars have their advantages and disadvantages. Write about some of those advantages. State which type of car you prefer and why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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