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Is it better to work on a project in a group or to work by yourself? Give reasons or examples from your life, events, etc. v.1

Is it better to work on a project in a group or to work by yourself? Give reasons or examples from your life, events, etc. v. 1
Although scientists raise people’s awareness about the environmental impact, they still remain their life habits. There are a number of reasons for this, but this situation should be addressed by encouraging humans in some practical ways. There are two main reasons why people are continuing their behaviours while the experts are warning the environmental problems. One reason is that people choosing convenience rather than worrying about other problems. Instead of using buses or trains to cut down on emissions from cars, people prefer to commute by cars or planes because of its time-saving. They do not have to wait in the long queue or huddle on public transportations. Another reason is that the disciplines and punishments on discharging chemical waste are not thorough. In Vietnam, some companies or industrial zones have been releasing toxic waste into rivers, causing the death of fish and other aquatic animals. The government should take some measures to tackle this issue effectively. First, public transportations should be invested in more by the authorities to encourage people to reduce their reliance on private cars. The ministries could extend more commuters in the peak time to reduce the traffic jams. Second, to alleviate the environmental problems the government ought to impose strict regulations on human activities such as lifting waste or discharging chemical waste. In Singapore, the maximum fine for littering offenders has been doubled to 2000 dollars for a first conviction. That is the reason why all the cities in Singapore are always clean. In conclusion, there are some known reasons for this trend. However, something should be done by the authorities to catch people’s attention to protect our habitats.
Although scientists raise
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people’s
awareness about the environmental impact, they
still
remain their life habits. There are a number of
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reasons
for this,
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but
this situation should
be addressed
by encouraging humans in
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some
practical ways.

There are two main
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reasons
why
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people
are continuing their
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behaviours
while the experts are warning the environmental problems. One
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reason
is that
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people
choosing convenience
rather
than worrying about other problems.
Instead
of using buses or trains to
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cut
down on emissions from cars,
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people
prefer to commute by cars or
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planes
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because
of its time-saving. They do not
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have to
wait in the long queue or huddle on public transportations. Another
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reason
is that the disciplines and punishments on discharging chemical
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waste
are not thorough. In Vietnam,
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some
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companies
or industrial zones have been releasing toxic
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waste
into rivers, causing the death of fish and other aquatic animals.

The
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government
should take
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some
measures to tackle this issue
effectively
.
First
, public transportations should
be invested
in more by the authorities to encourage
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their reliance on private cars. The ministries could extend more commuters in the peak time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the traffic jams. Second, to alleviate the environmental problems the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
ought to impose strict regulations on human activities such as lifting
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waste
or discharging chemical
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waste
. In Singapore, the maximum fine for littering offenders has
been doubled
to 2000 dollars for a
first
conviction.
That is
the
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reason
why all the cities in Singapore are always clean.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
known
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reasons
for this trend.
However
, something should
be done
by the authorities to catch
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people’s
attention to protect our habitats.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Is it better to work on a project in a group or to work by yourself? Give reasons or examples from your life, events, etc. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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