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Is it better to live in a small or a big city? Give reasons and examples to support you answer. v.1

Is it better to live in a small or a big city? Give reasons and examples to support you answer. v. 1
In this essay, I will be exploring if it is better to live in a small or a big city. I will give reasons using examples to define my answers, as well. I will try to explain why people have chosen a small or a big city. Many different people have a different style of life. Some people have chosen lives in a big city because, it is more convenient to them. Usually, the big cities have a better and more convenient communication, more ways to get a job, more cultural plays. It is thought that young people like to live in big cities because, they have more ways of choosing a good education, an easy way to get a job and a rich social life. For example; young people like to spend time in a restaurant, bar, go to the cinema and theatres. The young people like nightlife too. On the other hand, it is true the big cities are very noisy, the air is polluted and is a lot of traffic. The people believe the small cities usually are quieter, their activity is slow, they have a lot of free time for a social life. The transport is not convenient. For example; one bus come every one hour. Sometimes, people, have a problem finding a job. However, the air is clear, the people don't know what big traffic is. Nevertheless it doesn't have a lot of cultural centres and nightlife doesn't exist there. Taking everything into consideration, in my opinion people should choose the place which is more convenient for them. If somebody likes intensive life then, the big city will be perfect for him. However, I prefer the small cities.
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IELTS essay Is it better to live in a small or a big city? Give reasons and examples to support you answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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