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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.13

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 13
Nowadays, climate change is a much- discussed problem on earth, but some people argue that we need to accept it than try to stop it. I completely disagree with this argument, because i believe that we still have time to confront with this gravest problem and minimize the human impact the earth's climate. There are a variety of measures that governments and individuals could take to prevent, or at least alleviate, climate change. Governments should control of limit the carbon dioxide emissions that effect of global warming. They could invest in renewable source of energy such as wind, water and solar power. As individuals, we should also try to limit our contribution to climate change by using bicycles and public transport. Moreover, most of companies have to establish protective zones of natural scenery and electors support who propose to tackle climate change. On the other hand, if we get accustomed to live linked to climate change, I believe that the consequences will be disastrous. To give just one example, I am not optimistic that we would be able to cope with minor attempts. Millions of people would be displaced by flooding, tsunami within low-lying areas. These people would lose their homes and also their jobs, and they would be forced to migrate to nearby cities or perhaps to other countries. Therefore, as well as increased homelessness and the unemployment rate. To summarize, it would appear that we must more pay attention to climate change while I disagree with those who argue that we cannot preserve it.
Nowadays,
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climate
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change
is a much- discussed problem on earth,
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but
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some
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people
argue that we need to accept it than try to
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stop
it. I completely disagree with this argument,
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because
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i
believe that we
still
have time to confront with this gravest problem and minimize the human impact the earth's climate.

There are a variety of measures that
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governments
and individuals could take to
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prevent
, or at least alleviate,
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climate
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change
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Governments
should control of limit the carbon dioxide emissions that effect of global warming. They could invest in renewable source of energy such as wind, water and solar power. As individuals, we should
also
try to limit our contribution to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
by using bicycles and public transport.
Moreover
, most of
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companies
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have to
establish protective zones of natural scenery and electors support who propose to tackle
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climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

On the other hand
, if we
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get
accustomed to
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live
linked to
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climate
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change
, I believe that the consequences will be disastrous. To give
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just
one example, I am not optimistic that we would be able to cope with minor attempts. Millions of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would
be displaced
by flooding, tsunami within low-lying areas. These
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would lose their homes and
also
their jobs, and they would
be forced
to migrate to nearby cities or perhaps to other countries.
Therefore
,
as well
as increased homelessness and the unemployment rate.

To summarize
, it would appear that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
more pay attention to
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climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
while I disagree with those who argue that we cannot preserve it.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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