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Is it better for children to learn to read by using online material or by using printed material? Discuss and give your opinion. v.1

Is it better for children to learn to read by using online material or by using printed material? Discuss and give your opinion. v. 1
Acquiring knowledge is a process which never ends in one’s lifetime as we get to learn something new every day. Although, with technological advancement, new methods of learning have been introduced, it has been the talk of the town, whether one should rely on the internet to learn or to limit themselves to books. This essay will discuss both the views and will show that the latter is superior to the former. Though, there are no restrictions and limits to the content available on the internet, its authenticity is always questionable. In addition to this, the content online is readily available to people at all times, however, it can be a little challenging for children who aren’t tech savvy to access it. Also, people from the remote areas around the globe may not have such facilities available to them through which they can grasp the knowhow shared on such a medium. To illustrate, notwithstanding, Wikipedia is considered to have information about almost everything, however, anyone can change it upon their discretion. Having said that, printed material is available in even the smallest of the cities in a country; even if not, the same can always be arranged through logistics and can be made available on requirement. Besides, learning through books is a conventional method which is being used for ages, hence, it is easy for all to adapt. Needless to say, the material on the printed medium is drafted by authors who have a deep understanding of the subject which makes it unquestionable. To illustrate, many governments around the globe have control on what gets published online due to which the content cannot be trusted. In my opinion, educating children through books is far better than websites due to their authenticity and availability.
Acquiring knowledge is a process which never ends in one’s lifetime as we
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get
to learn something new every day. Although, with technological advancement, new methods of learning
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have
been introduced
, it has been the talk of the town, whether one should rely on the internet to learn or to limit themselves to books. This essay will discuss both the views and will
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show
that the latter is superior to the former.

Though, there are no restrictions and limits to the content
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available
on the internet, its authenticity is always questionable.
In addition
to this, the content online is
readily
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available
to
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people
at all times,
however
, it can be a
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little
challenging for children who aren’t
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tech savvy
to access it.
Also
,
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people
from the remote areas around the globe may not have such facilities
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available
to them
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through
which they can grasp the
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knowhow
shared on such a medium. To illustrate, notwithstanding, Wikipedia
is considered
to have information about almost everything,
however
, anyone can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
it upon their discretion.

Having said that, printed material is
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available
in even the smallest of the cities in a country; even if not, the same can always
be arranged
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through
logistics and can
be made
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available
on requirement.
Besides
, learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
through
books is a conventional method which is being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for ages,
hence
, it is easy for all to adapt. Needless to say, the material on the printed medium
is drafted
by authors who have a deep understanding of the subject which
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makes
it unquestionable. To illustrate,
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many
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governments
around the globe have control on what
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gets
published online due to which the content cannot
be trusted
.

In my opinion, educating children
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through
books is far better than websites due to their authenticity and availability.
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IELTS essay Is it better for children to learn to read by using online material or by using printed material? Discuss and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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