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Do You Prefer Finding Information By Reading Books Or Searching The Internet? UseDetails And Examples To Support Your Explanation. v.1

Do You Prefer Finding Information By Reading Books Or Searching The Internet? UseDetails And Examples To Support Your Explanation. v. 1
Owing to the problem of increased number of road accidents, the safety of the citizens is a great concern; however, this problem can be controlled to some extent by imposing stricter punishments for driving offences. I agree to the idea of imposing stricter punishments for driving offences. The most common cause of road accidents reported these days is drunk driving. Drunk driving is a serious issue in every country. There is an increased reports of drunk driving in the recent times. Government must impose a stricter punishment for this offence as it is a man made issue and can be tackled if acted accordingly. Punishments like cancellation of driver's license, or a penalty can control this traffic offence to an extend. Also, authorities must keep a constant check on such drivers and an alert system should be implemented. In addition, to this there are many other causes of road accidents, namely: violation of traffic rules, failure to stop at pedestrian crossings, over-speeding, jaywalking and many more. Competition between young drivers have become a serious issue these days. Traffic department must start an awareness program to all citizens about traffic rules and consequences faced for violating them. The awareness program must be good enough to attract all age groups as it is a better to instill positive attitude in young minds as it will be perceived well. In conclusion, I believe that imposing strict punishments for driving offences can ensure safety on roads relatively. In addition, the pedestrians should be made aware of the rules.
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road
accidents, the safety of the citizens is a great concern;
however
, this problem can
be controlled
to
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some
extent by imposing stricter
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punishments
for
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driving
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offences
.

I
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agree
to the
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idea
of imposing stricter
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punishments
for
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driving
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offences
.

The most common cause of
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road
accidents reported these days
is drunk
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driving
. Drunk
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driving
is a serious issue in every country. There is an increased
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reports
of drunk
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driving
in the recent times.
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Government
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must
impose a stricter
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punishment
for this
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offence
as it is a
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man
made issue and can
be tackled
if acted
accordingly
.
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Punishments
like cancellation of driver's license, or a penalty can control this
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traffic
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offence
to
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an extend
.
Also
, authorities
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must
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keep
a constant
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check
on such drivers and an alert system should
be implemented
.

In addition
, to this there are
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many
other causes of
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road
accidents,
namely
: violation of
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traffic
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rules
, failure to
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stop
at pedestrian crossings, over-speeding, jaywalking and
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more. Competition between young drivers have become a serious issue these days.
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Traffic
department
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must
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start
an awareness program to all citizens about
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traffic
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rules
and consequences faced for violating them. The awareness program
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must
be
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good
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enough
to attract all age groups as it is a better to instill
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positive
attitude in young minds as it will
be perceived
well.

In conclusion
, I believe that imposing strict
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punishments
for
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driving
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offences
can ensure safety on
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roads
relatively
.
In addition
, the pedestrians should
be made
aware of the
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rules
.
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IELTS essay Do You Prefer Finding Information By Reading Books Or Searching The Internet? UseDetails And Examples To Support Your Explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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