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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v. 5
Today's society is flourishing day by day in different fields. But the doctors give more importance than the inventors who have dedicated their lives to research. This essay does not agree much with this statement because inventors play equal role as doctors in the development of the community. In further paragraph in intent to put forth my view points. Doctors plays vital character in the community. They help people to cure their diseases. Hence, they are considered ideal in society and stands an important portrayal in the nation's eye. However, scientist too plays a major role in the development of the medical field. It helps doctors to use new drugs and to cure communicable and noncommunicable disease. For instance, research like genomics helps to treat many deadly diseases. Thus, advancement in the field of medical, helps doctors to serve better to the people of the society. In this modernization, new technology, researchers are taking place. Scientist spends hundreds of hours doing research in medical science, space, machines, finding remedies for deadly diseases and much more. They dedicate their entire life for the growth and development of the country. For instance, there were many new machines invented which are used to diagnose different diseases like ECG, MRI, X-RAYS and many more. Due to which medical science has touched new heights due to the hard work of the inventors. Therefore, inventors are the founders of this world. In conclusion, I would pen down, saying that, both inventors and doctors are equally important in the society.
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Today
's society is flourishing day by day in
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different
fields.
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But
the
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doctors
give more importance than the
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inventors
who have dedicated their
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lives
to research. This essay does not
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agree
much with this statement
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because
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inventors
play equal role as
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doctors
in the development of the community. In
further
paragraph in intent to put forth my view points.

Possible agreement error. You should probably use: "Doctor plays", "doctor plays".
Doctors plays
vital character in the community. They
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help
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people
to cure their
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diseases
.
Hence
, they
are considered
ideal in society and stands an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
portrayal in the nation's eye.
However
, scientist too plays a major role in the development of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
field. It
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helps
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doctors
to
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use
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new
drugs and to cure communicable and noncommunicable
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disease
.
For instance
, research like genomics
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helps
to treat
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many
deadly
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diseases
.
Thus
, advancement in the field of
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medical
,
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helps
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doctors
to serve better to the
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people
of the society.

In this modernization,
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new
technology, researchers are taking place. Scientist spends hundreds of hours doing research in
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medical
science, space, machines, finding remedies for deadly
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diseases
and much more. They dedicate their entire life for the growth and development of the country.
For instance
, there were
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many
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new
machines invented which are
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used
to diagnose
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different
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diseases
like ECG, MRI, X-RAYS and
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many
more. Due to which
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medical
science has touched
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new
heights due to the
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hard
work of the
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inventors
.
Therefore
,
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inventors
are the founders of this world.

In conclusion
, I would pen down, saying that, both
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inventors
and
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doctors
are
equally
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important
in the society.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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