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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v. 3
Inventors are creative people who develop new ideas and products, whereas doctors are specialists who make us feel better when we are ill. I believe that both types of people are important to society, but in different ways. Inventors have had an enormous impact on our lives. In the past, they developed things like electricity, television and aeroplanes. These transformed people’s home lives and working conditions and enabled them to travel more quickly to other countries. More recently, inventors have created computers, the World Wide Web and many other technological products that we now rely on completely. For these reasons, most people would agree that inventors are important people. Doctors, on the other hand, save lives. They train for many years and they develop knowledge and skills that ordinary people do not have. If we get ill, we need someone who knows what is wrong and can tell us what medicine to take. If we go to hospital, we expect doctors to look after us. Everyone depends on doctors in this way all through their life. Although we cannot live without doctors, it is also true that we cannot live without inventors. In fact, they also depend on each other. Doctors use inventions to help them in their work, and inventors get ill and need doctors to cure them. To conclude, I think doctors and inventors are equally important. Like many people in society, they play an important part in human progress. So it is impossible to say who is more important.
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are creative
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people
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who
develop new
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ideas
and products, whereas
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doctors
are specialists
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who
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make
us feel better when we are ill. I believe that both types of
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people
are
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important
to society,
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but
in
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different
ways.

Inventors have had an enormous impact on our
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lives
. In the past, they developed things like electricity, television and
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aeroplanes
. These transformed
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people’s
home
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lives
and working conditions and enabled them to travel more
quickly
to
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other
countries. More recently,
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inventors
have created computers, the World Wide Web and
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many
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other
technological products that we
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now
rely on completely. For these reasons, most
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people
would
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agree
that
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inventors
are
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important
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people
.

Doctors, on the
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other
hand, save
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lives
. They train for
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many
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years and
they develop knowledge and
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skills
that ordinary
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people
do not have. If we
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get
ill, we need someone
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who
knows what is
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wrong
and can
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tell
us what medicine to take. If we go to hospital, we
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expect
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doctors
to look after us. Everyone depends on
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doctors
in this way all through their life.

Although we cannot
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live
without
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doctors
, it is
also
true that we cannot
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live
without
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inventors
. In fact, they
also
depend on each
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other
.
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Doctors
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use
inventions to
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help
them in their work, and
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inventors
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get
ill and need
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doctors
to cure them.

To conclude
, I
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think
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doctors
and
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inventors
are
equally
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important
. Like
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many
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people
in society, they play an
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important
part in human progress.
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So
it is impossible to say
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who
is more
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important
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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