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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.4

Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. v. 4
It is argued that inventors who create helpful equipments to innovate the people’s lives are less important than doctors. I totally disagree with this statement because I believe that both inventors and doctors have an enormous impact on our life but in different ways. Doubtlessly, inventors play a crucial role in society. In the past, they devoted a huge number of inventions to the development of humanity, such as electricity, air-condition and television which change lives standard both physically and mentally. In addition, the creations like the Internet, computer and smart phone have moved us into the new era of technology, allowing people to connect with each other regardless of time and space. On the other hand, it is obvious that doctors hold a significant place in our lives. They are specialists who help patients deal with not only physical injuries but also mental problem. For instance, Joseph Lister, who invented antiseptic saved thousands of lives and created an important event in history of humanity. If there were no doctors, no one could cure the patients and the population would rapidly decrease. Inventors and doctors are really important people. In fact they rely on and support each other. Doctors use equipments from inventors to do their job well. Inventors have doctors cure them when they become sick. In conclusion, I do not agree with the view that inventors are less essential for our lives than doctors because both of them have own role and values in society.
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is argued
that
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inventors
who create helpful equipments to innovate the
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people
’s
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lives
are less
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important
than
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doctors
. I
totally
disagree with this statement
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because
I believe that both
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inventors
and
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doctors
have an enormous impact on our life
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but
in
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different
ways.

Doubtlessly
,
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inventors
play a crucial role in society. In the past, they devoted a huge number of inventions to the development of humanity, such as electricity, air-condition and television which
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change
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lives
standard both
physically
and mentally.
In addition
, the creations like the Internet, computer and smart phone have
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moved
us into the new era of technology, allowing
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people
to connect with each other regardless of time and space.

On the other hand
, it is obvious that
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doctors
hold a significant place in our
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lives
. They are specialists who
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help
patients deal with not
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only
physical injuries
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but
also
mental problem.
For instance
, Joseph Lister, who invented antiseptic saved thousands of
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lives
and created an
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important
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event
in history of humanity. If there were no
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doctors
, no one could cure the patients and the population would
rapidly
decrease.

Inventors and
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doctors
are
really
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important
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people
. In
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fact they
rely on and support each other.
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Doctors
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use
equipments from
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inventors
to do their job well.
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Inventors
have
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doctors
cure them when they become sick.

In conclusion
, I do not
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agree
with the view that
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inventors
are less essential for our
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lives
than
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doctors
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because
both of them have
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own
role and values in society.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
247 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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