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Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.3

Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. 3
The methods of mitigating traffic congestion have been a heated topic of controversy. Some people argue that the construction of larger roads is the answer for the problem. However, I contend that such a solution is ineffective in the long term, while the option to construct railways and subways is a far better measure. There is a common fallacy that governmental spending on building larger roads could sustainably address the problem of traffic congestion. An increase in road size could reduce the traffic intensity in the short term, but larger roads also mean that the citizens are encouraged to purchase more individual vehicles. This leads to the fact that the roads, albeit larger, would soon be filled with intense traffic again. For instance, traffic jams returned to Shanghai’s main streets not long after they were expanded in the early 1990s. In brief, if this solution is implemented, traffic jams would still persist in the long run. Rail and subway systems, however, could ensure that traffic congestion is properly addressed. Unlike cars and buses, trains are capable of transporting hundreds of people simultaneously and thus would meet the transport demand of a vast number of passengers. Moreover, trains do not have to go through intersections and traffic lights, and dedicated lines ensure their travel is hardly interrupted. In other words, trains are always on time regardless of the level of traffic. This level of punctuality would encourage many people to choose railways and subways as their primary means of transport, and the number of individuals vehicles would decrease accordingly. As a result, traffic congestion could be tackled successfully. The existing data provides a concrete foundation to conclude that building more and larger roads in an unsustainable measure, while train and subway lines would be a much more effective solution for the problem of traffic congestion.
The methods of mitigating
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traffic
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congestion
have been a heated topic of controversy.
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Some
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people
argue that the construction of larger
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roads
is the answer for the problem.
However
, I contend that such a solution is ineffective in the long term, while the option to construct railways and
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subways
is a far better measure.

There is a common fallacy that governmental spending on building larger
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roads
could
sustainably
address the problem of
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traffic
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congestion
. An increase in
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road
size could
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reduce
the
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traffic
intensity in the short term,
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but
larger
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roads
also
mean that the citizens
are encouraged
to
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purchase
more individual vehicles. This leads to the fact that the
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roads
, albeit larger, would
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soon
be filled
with intense
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traffic
again.
For instance
,
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traffic
jams returned to Shanghai’s main streets not long after they
were expanded
in the early 1990s.
In brief
, if this solution
is implemented
,
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traffic
jams would
still
persist in the long run.

Rail and
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subway
systems,
however
, could ensure that
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traffic
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congestion
is
properly
addressed. Unlike cars and buses,
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trains
are capable of transporting hundreds of
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people
simultaneously
and
thus
would
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meet
the transport demand of a vast number of passengers.
Moreover
,
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trains
do not
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have to
go through intersections and
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traffic
lights, and dedicated lines ensure their travel is hardly interrupted.
In other words
,
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trains
are always on time regardless of the level of
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traffic
. This level of punctuality would encourage
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many
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people
to choose railways and
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subways
as their primary means of transport, and the number of individuals vehicles would decrease
accordingly
.
As a result
,
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traffic
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congestion
could
be tackled
successfully
.

The existing data provides a concrete foundation
to conclude
that building more and larger
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roads
in an unsustainable measure, while
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train
and
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subway
lines would be a much more effective solution for the problem of
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traffic
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congestion
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. 3

Essay
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4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
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