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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages v.5

International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages v. 5
It is often argued that international tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. But I feel that there is a considerable impact on local inhabitants and the environment due to the increase of the tourism in a particular place. First of all, the cost of living in the area which is prevailing as the international tourism spot increases drastically. Due to this, the local inhabitants will suffer a lot to get their daily essentials, since they have them to get them for a higher price. The quality of the essential products which are sold in the particular place also decreases significantly, because the supply needs to be done to a higher population who are added through tourism. This is one of the reasons through which the tourism affects the life cycle of the local inhabitants of the particular place. Secondly, the increase in the tourism of a particular place will lead to degradation of the sanity and pollutes the environment of the particular place. The improper waste management will end up in the scattering of the waste in the streets and will lead to non hygienic condition. This rapidly affects the health of the local inhabitants and will lead to their hospitalization if proper safety were not taken. In order to prevent these situations, the local governing bodies should of the particular place should take extra measures for the management of the waste. By this way, the environment of the particular place gets effected due to the increase of the tourism. To conclude, the economical benefit attained by a particular place through the tourism is overwhelmed by the negative impact on the local inhabitants and the environment of that place.
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often
argued that international
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tourism
has brought enormous benefit to
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many
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places
.
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But
I feel that there is a considerable impact on
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local
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inhabitants
and the
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environment
due to the
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increase
of the
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tourism
in a
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particular
place.

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First of all
, the cost of living in the area which is prevailing as the international
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tourism
spot
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increases
drastically
. Due to this, the
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local
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inhabitants
will suffer a lot to
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get
their daily essentials, since they have them to
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get
them for a higher price. The quality of the essential products which
are sold
in the
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particular
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place
also
decreases
significantly
,
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because
the supply needs to
be done
to a higher population who are
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added
through
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tourism
. This is one of the reasons through which the
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tourism
affects the life cycle of the
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local
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inhabitants
of the
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particular
place.

Secondly
, the
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increase
in the
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tourism
of a
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particular
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place
will lead to degradation of the sanity and pollutes the
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environment
of the
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particular
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place
. The improper waste management will
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end
up in the scattering of the waste in the streets and will lead to
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non hygienic
condition. This
rapidly
affects the health of the
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local
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inhabitants
and will lead to their hospitalization if proper safety were not taken. In order to
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prevent
these situations, the
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local
governing bodies should
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of
the
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particular
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place
should take extra measures for the management of the waste. By this way, the
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environment
of the
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particular
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place
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gets
effected due to the
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increase
of the tourism.

To conclude
, the economical benefit attained by a
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particular
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place
through the
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tourism
is overwhelmed
by the
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negative
impact on the
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local
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inhabitants
and the
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environment
of that
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place
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
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