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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v.2

International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 2
Travel industry has experienced a major boom in the later part of the 20th century and has been a boon in disguise, which has helped some weaker nations to uplift their failing economies. While questions have been raised regarding the negative impacts that accompany the growth in the travel sector, these definitely do not outweigh the associated benefits. The economic boost that accompanies a successful travel industry is quite well recognised and Thailand is the best example. The entire Thai economy revolves around tourism and the country had been able to uplift its socio economic status through its flourishing hospitality sector. Egypt is another nation that is heavily dependent on its hospitality sector. The growth in the number of incoming tourists leads to innumerable prospects in terms of local entrepreneurship & employment generation. This is also associated with international investments and infrastructure development. The national authorities, in order to ensure safety of the international visitors provide better law and order enforcement, improved transportation and healthcare facilities, which in turn benefit the local population. On the other hand, the rising influx of holidaymakers is associated with increased incidences of crimes, prostitution and antisocial activities like drugs, human trafficking and gambling, which affect the values of the indigenous society. The local population are also affected by the growth in property value indices. Environmentalists are also concerned regarding environmental remodelling, that is associated with increased tourist activities in natural reserves. In this context, it is worth mentioning that, by enforcing stern law and order and implementing strict legislations, governments can control most of these negative impacts of tourism. Henceforth, it can be confidently conveyed that, even though the growth in travel industry has accompanying negative social impacts, these do not outweigh the contributions made by this sector towards social development.
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Travel
industry has experienced a major boom in the later part of the 20th century and has been a boon in disguise, which has
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helped
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some
weaker nations to uplift their failing economies. While questions have
been raised
regarding the
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negative
impacts that accompany the
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growth
in the
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travel
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sector
, these definitely do not outweigh the
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associated
benefits.

The economic boost that accompanies a successful
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travel
industry is quite well
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recognised
and Thailand is the best example. The entire Thai economy revolves around tourism and the country had been able to uplift its
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socio economic
status through its flourishing hospitality
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sector
. Egypt is another nation
that is
heavily
dependent on its hospitality
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sector
. The
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growth
in the number of incoming tourists leads to innumerable prospects in terms of local entrepreneurship & employment generation. This is
also
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associated
with international investments and infrastructure development. The national authorities, in order to ensure safety of the international visitors provide better law and order enforcement,
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improved
transportation and healthcare facilities, which in turn benefit the local population.

On the other hand
, the rising influx of holidaymakers is
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associated
with increased incidences of crimes, prostitution and antisocial activities like drugs, human trafficking and gambling, which affect the values of the indigenous society. The local population are
also
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affected
by the
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growth
in property value indices. Environmentalists are
also
concerned regarding environmental
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remodelling
,
that is
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associated
with increased tourist activities in natural reserves. In this context, it is worth mentioning that, by enforcing stern law and order and implementing strict
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legislations
,
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governments
can control most of these
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negative
impacts of tourism.

Henceforth, it can be
confidently
conveyed that,
even though
the
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growth
in
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travel
industry has accompanying
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negative
social impacts, these do not outweigh the contributions made by this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
towards social development.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6
Overall Band Score
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