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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v.4

International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 4
There is no doubt that international tourists have brought a lot of positive impact to many countries. However, these benefits also come with many negative issues. Personally, I feel that international tourism has resulted more advantages than disadvantages to the affected nations in general. In this essay, I will examine both the benefits and their related cost and support my opinion accordingly. First of all, many people argue that many local inhabitants have been sacrificed in order to make way for the development of tourist attractions. For examples, trees were cut down so that hotels can be constructed; local old buildings were destroyed and replaced by new shopping malls; local residence have to be relocated so that their land can be used for new airports. However, people tend to ignore the economics and social benefits brought by these developments. For example, the number of jobs created by the constructions of hotels and shopping malls could stimulate the economic growth of a nation and benefit the people and the nation. Secondly, many people also claimed that the invasion of foreign tourists will increase the social problems such as crime rates immoral activities. For examples, they claimed that tourists usually like to visit pubs and clubs in the evening and that will lead to higher rate of alcohol related problems such as noise pollution, alcohol-related violence like fights and batterings and prostitution. However, I believe that the millions of foreign dollars brought in by these tourists could actually decrease the problems if the money are put into proper used by the government. For example, the tax collected from the entertainment outlet could be used to help combat crime and actually make safer country. In conclusion, I believe that if we look at the overall picture of international tourism when doing the cost-benefit analysis, we will see that they have more advantages than disadvantages.
There is no doubt that international
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tourists
have brought
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a lot of
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positive
impact to
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many
countries.
However
, these
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benefits
also
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come
with
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many
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negative
issues.
Personally
, I feel that international tourism has resulted more advantages than disadvantages to the
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affected
nations
in general
. In this essay, I will examine both the
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benefits
and their related cost and support my opinion
accordingly
.

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First of all
,
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many
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people
argue that
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many
local inhabitants have
been sacrificed
in order to
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make
way for the development of
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tourist
attractions. For
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examples
, trees were
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cut
down
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so
that hotels can
be constructed
; local
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old
buildings were
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destroyed
and replaced by new shopping malls; local residence
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have to
be relocated
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so
that their land can be
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used
for new airports.
However
,
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people
tend to
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ignore
the economics and social
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benefits
brought by these developments. For
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example
, the number of jobs created by the constructions of hotels and shopping malls could stimulate the economic growth of a nation and
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benefit
the
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people
and the nation.

Secondly
,
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many
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people
also
claimed that the invasion of foreign
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tourists
will increase the social problems such as crime rates immoral activities. For
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examples
, they claimed that
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tourists
usually
like to visit pubs and clubs in the evening and that will lead to higher rate of alcohol related problems such as noise pollution, alcohol-related violence like fights and batterings and prostitution.
However
, I believe that the millions of foreign dollars brought in by these
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tourists
could actually decrease the problems if the money
are put
into proper
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used
by the
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government
. For
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example
, the tax collected from the entertainment outlet could be
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used
to
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help
combat crime and actually
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make
safer country.

In conclusion
, I believe that if we look at the
overall
picture of international tourism when doing the cost-benefit analysis, we will
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see
that they have more advantages than disadvantages.
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IELTS essay International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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