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As we are facing many problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

As we are facing many problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. v. 1
It is irrefutable that nowadays the whole world has become a global village and communication It is irrefutable that nowadays the whole world has become a global village and communication and trade between different countries is also becoming more frequent than ever before. At the same time, the whole planet is facing problems, such as environmental problem, terrorism and poverty and diseases. In my view, countries cannot solve these problems on their own and governments of different countries must cooperate to fight these problems. To begin with, take environmental problems. It is a bitter truth that the Earth is facing the problem of global warming and if the whole world does not unite to fight this problem, then the day is not far when the whole Earth will become a boiling pot and life would not be possible here. The Kyoto protocol has been signed by many countries of the United Nations in which, they have pledged not to make industries, which emit more than 5. 2% carbon dioxide. Furthermore, there are problems like terrorism, which are having a detrimental effect on our society. There are various global organizations, which are working towards eradicating these issues but it cannot be possible without trust and harmony between different nations. What is more, the poor countries are getting aid from developed countries to develop their infrastructure and develop themselves. In these countries many people are suffering from starvation and poverty which can harm the neighbouring richer nations and that is why all nations realize the importance of maintaining good relations. Summing up, good relations between different countries are absolutely necessary nowadays to solve these critical issues.
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whole
world has become a
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global
village and communication It is irrefutable that nowadays the
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whole
world has become a
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global
village and communication and trade between
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different
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countries
is
also
becoming more frequent than ever
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before
. At the same time, the
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whole
planet is facing
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problems
, such as environmental
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problem
, terrorism and poverty and diseases. In my view,
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countries
cannot solve these
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problems
on their
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own
and
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governments
of
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different
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countries
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must
cooperate to fight these problems.

To
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begin
with, take environmental
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problems
. It is a bitter truth that the Earth is facing the
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problem
of
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global
warming and if the
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whole
world does not unite to fight this
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problem
, then the day is not far when the
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whole
Earth will become a boiling pot and life would not be possible here. The Kyoto protocol has
been signed
by
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many
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countries
of the United Nations in which, they have pledged not to
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make
industries, which emit more than 5. 2% carbon dioxide.

Furthermore
, there are
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problems
like terrorism, which are having a detrimental effect on our society. There are various
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global
organizations, which are working towards eradicating these issues
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but
it cannot be possible without trust and harmony between
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different
nations.

What is more
, the poor
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countries
are getting aid from developed countries to develop their infrastructure and develop themselves. In these
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countries
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many
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people
are suffering from starvation and poverty which can harm the
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neighbouring
richer nations and
that is
why all nations realize the importance of maintaining
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good
relations.

Summing up,
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good
relations between
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different
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countries
are
absolutely
necessary nowadays to solve these critical issues.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay As we are facing many problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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