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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.7

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 7
In present, the new development technology has been admiring to economic for nations. In that the extremely large level of job and new opportunity are available and that can be get a high pay for new employees its good for the country; However, few mankind is believe that national society get rule for employment to certain level of working paid. Also, the government are more restriction on the company for paying to their employees. If asked to support, I partially agree with the given statement and that elaborated in further. Modern development country has small numbers of people they get an extremely paid for their job. Moreover, they can not too much work rather than the other hard-working job because of those humans could a perfect time period to work. The other think is that they can quality work so some believe that this is good for our country and also growth of the our economic. For instance, a fresher student is working on a largest IT company in this he can give a particular time period to complete his work. Additionally, he has to smart work and get more salary. Those type of job such as, teacher, manager, accountant and many more. On the other hand, few credits that the governments should make very hard rules for the employees that’s the people cannot stratified with this law. In that our government has to make a few levels are demonstrate categories of job and its paid. For example, an engineer is working on a machinery company in that he works a lot and its salary is very low that the people not stratified with governments rules and regulations. So, people believe that that’s not perfect for the growing country. To conclude, a hard-working people have not much salaries, while, the small work or the smart-working people has high paid. In my opinion, government should change the rule for the company as well as the employees to get work and its paid.
In present, the new development technology has been admiring to economic for nations. In that the
extremely
large level of
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job
and new opportunity are available and that can be
Consider using a past participle here: "got", "gotten".
get
a high pay for new
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employees
its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for the country;
However
,
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few mankind
is
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believe
that national society
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get
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rule
for employment to certain level of working
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paid
.
Also
, the
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government
are more restriction on the
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company
for paying to their
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employees
. If asked to support, I
partially
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agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
statement and that elaborated in
further
.

Modern development country has
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small
numbers of
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people
they
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get
an
extremely
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paid
for their
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job
.
Moreover
, they can not too much
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work
rather
than the other
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hard
-working
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job
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because
of those humans could a perfect time period to
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work
. The other
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think
is that they can quality
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work
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so
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some
believe that this is
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good
for our country and
also
growth of
A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "our economic" or "the economic"?
the our economic
.
For instance
, a fresher student is working on
Use "the" with the superlative.
a
largest IT
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company
in this he can give a particular time period to complete his
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work
.
Additionally
, he
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has to
smart
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work
and
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get
more salary. Those type of
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job
such as, teacher, manager, accountant and
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many
more.

On the other hand
, few credits that the
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governments
should
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make
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very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
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rules
for the
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employees
that’s the
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people
cannot
The verb 'cannot' requires the base form of the verb: "stratify"
stratified
with this law. In that our
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government
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has to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a few levels are demonstrate categories of
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job
and its
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paid
.
For example
, an engineer is working on a machinery
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company
in that he works a lot and its salary is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
low that the
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people
not stratified with
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governments
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rules
and regulations.
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So
,
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people
believe
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that that
’s not perfect for the growing country.

To conclude
, a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-working
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people
have not
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much
salaries, while, the
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small
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work
or the smart-working
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people
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has
high
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paid
. In my opinion,
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government
should
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change
the
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rule
for the
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company
as well
as the
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employees
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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work
and its
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paid
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
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